Or perhaps this is more concise:

“In a world where religious fanatics rule supreme and magic users are hunted, a retired courtesan must uncover the secrets within a forbidden manuscript to save magic from total annihilation and return the Gifted to power.”

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Thanks again!

In a world where religious fantatics rule supreme and magic users have been hunted to near extinction, a retired courtesan must uncover the secrets held within a forbidden manuscript in order to save magic from total annihilation and return the Gifted to power.

I believe I’ve finally cracked the elevator pitch for my novel.

Wonderful! Thank you. Amazing how we have such an easy time over-thinking EVERYTHING.

Just add it to your log-line.

…must save magic from a religious/political group bent on its destruction and return the remnants of her people to their rightful power.

Says a lot with a little :).

The People of the Creator and their untouchable Inquisitors have outlawed magic. They are a political/religious group that has risen to power in the 7 years since the Cataclysm wiped out a large portion of the Gifted population.

The challenge I run into here is how do I incorporate this into the log-line/elevator pitch successfully, without raising more questions / confusion. Do you have any tips on how to successfully integrate this tid-bit into the pitch?

So grateful for your help!

Actually that is pretty strong, but who is endangering magic? That needs to be part of the log-line.

Might I test out a log line / pitch on you, as well? I would love the feedback.

In a world where magic is outlawed, a retired courtesan must uncover the secrets held within a forbidden manuscript in order to save magic from total annihilation and return the Gifted to power.

Cheers!