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<p>Editing makes up a HUGE part of the writing process. Oh, if all we writers had to do was sit down and slap glorious words on a page. If only it were so easy. For those new to this profession, here&#8217;s a truth bomb. This job is rewarding but it isn&#8217;t for the faint of heart. Writing is tough. </p>



<p>Professionals only make it seem easy.</p>



<p>I recently turned in my ghostwriting project. My client has given me permission to share in some of the glory, so to speak. <a href="https://www.amazon.com/Trap-Social-Media-Surveillance-Capitalism-ebook/dp/B096489FLQ/ref=sr_1_1?crid=36YM5GMLMKPHE&amp;dchild=1&amp;keywords=the+trap+jewels+jade&amp;qid=1624554526&amp;sprefix=The+Trap+jewe%2Cstripbooks%2C167&amp;sr=8-1" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer noopener">The Trap: Sex, Social Media, and Surveillance Capitalism</a> is now LIVE. Yes, my client worked in the adult industry for twenty years. It&#8217;s a book about the pitfalls of adult entertainment (for performers as well as the audience). </p>



<p>Aaand the final ended up at around 91,000 words (though, believe it or not, it&#8217;s a super quick read for being such a deep book).</p>



<p>Sure, writing about this topic was tough. Writing with a partner, the research, making sure I held true to the client&#8217;s voice, etc. was enough to make me want to go live in a blanket fort with my old Barbies and tubs of frosting. All in all, though, the writing was <em>easy</em> compared to the editing.</p>



<p>For those who are new, who maybe don&#8217;t know this next part, feel free to skim down to the tips <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f642.png" alt="🙂" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> .</p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>Editing is More Than Proofreading</strong></h2>



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<p>Many new authors enter into professional publishing believing a few myths, which I shall now debunk. First of all, there are MANY types of editing/editors and the cost will vary. When I wrote my first 187,000 word &#8216;novel&#8217; I:</p>



<ul><li> was an idiot who was too epically stupid to know I was epically stupid</li><li> believed editors were only there to check for grammar issues, typos, punctuation, etc. </li><li>thought that I didn&#8217;t need to sully my hands hunting down typos because editors would catch all my boo-boos for me</li></ul>



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<p>*clutches sides laughing*</p>



<p>The EFA (Editorial Freelancers Association) has a great breakdown of all the types of editing, range of cost, pace to expect, etc. <a href="https://www.the-efa.org/rates/" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer noopener">HERE.</a></p>



<p>I&#8217;ve done all kinds of editing, but my strength is actually developmental editing (namely because I prefer it and my up close vision is 20/200). </p>



<p>If you refer to the chart, developmental editing can run from $46-$50 per hour with a pace of 4-6 pages per hour. What does this mean? </p>



<p>Let&#8217;s use an example.</p>



<p>Say we have a sci-fi novel that runs about 65,000 words (with a &#8216;page&#8217; being 250 words). This works out to 260 pages. Divide this by 6 and that is roughly 44 hours. This means a professional copy edit can easily run between $2000-$2200&#8230;</p>



<p>&#8230;and that is only the first pass.</p>



<p>I&#8217;d also like to mention these numbers are averages from the EFA. I&#8217;ve known editors who charge $8,000 to $10,000 or more. But even if an editor offers a bargain basement deal&#8212;like say $500&#8212;if they have to go through multiple times? Back at a couple grand.</p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>Count the Cost</strong></h2>



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<p>A huge part of why I harp on learning about craft and <strong>how to write </strong>is that it will save you a TON of money when you hire an editor. If a book is clean and the author understands three-act structure, grammar, POV, character arc, and the basics of storytelling, I generally can up my pace&#8230;A LOT. If the content is solid, then odds are also good I&#8217;ll only need to make ONE pass.</p>



<p>Fairly safe to assume I am not alone in this.</p>



<p>*shout out to all the editors*</p>



<p>If I can get to the actual EDITING, then I can do 10-20 pages an hour. This lowers our total time down to 26-13 hours, cutting the bill at least in HALF. But, when I am bogged down with plot holes large enough to drive an Amazon truck through? POV issues? Typos, jarring jumps in time, and all the other basic stuff the author should have fixed? </p>



<p>It takes me MUCH LONGER.</p>



<p>The same, obviously, goes for all kinds of editors and proofreaders. I have LITERALLY had writers tell me they didn&#8217;t bother fixing their copy because, &#8220;That was the editor&#8217;s job.&#8221;</p>



<p>Okay, if that author sends pages (a mess) to an agent, that will likely be an automatic rejection. Publishers are in the business of making money. Spending the cost of a trip to Europe on developmental and line-editing is simply bad business.</p>



<p>Should that author want to self-publish then editing is a HUGE deal. <strong>When we self-publish, we are the publisher. </strong>This means we incur all the costs usually absorbed by others.</p>



<p>If we get lazy and have to spend a small fortune on editing alone, how many books do we need to sell to simply get out of the red?</p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>Why Does Editing Matter?</strong></h2>



<p>Before we get to the tips, I am going to state (probably) the obvious. I shouldn&#8217;t have to, but whatever. I&#8217;ve read some wonderful writing samples, but there were so many errors they jarred me out of the story. </p>



<p>Typos and rookie blunders frustrate readers.</p>



<p>I recently borrowed a book on Audible and had to stop reading. While the story was cool, the writing was AWFUL. It was as if someone gifted the author a thesaurus and he decided to use every single descriptor. When the description is so heavy that I forget the point of the sentence? That&#8217;s a problem. And I LOVE description! So to irritate me is a real feat.</p>



<p>There were too many places where the author botched subject-verb agreement. He had run-on sentences everywhere. The story was just plain terrible writing. It&#8217;s great that this author could put a book out on Audible, but, as with all Kindle Unlimited books, the author is paid by the page. If weak writing makes readers give up, then that&#8217;s a waste of everyone&#8217;s time and effort.</p>



<p>All of this, for the record, was/is totally avoidable. </p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>DIY Editing</strong></h2>



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<p>The tips I am going to give y&#8217;all today are to help save time and money. YOU cannot edit your own work&#8230;not fully. When I negotiated my ghostwriting contract, I made this very clear to my client. I CANNOT SEE ALL MY OWN MISTAKES (and neither can y&#8217;all). Editing had to be a separate expense, a task delegated to a totally different person.</p>



<p>This said, I write super clean copy. Once the book was final, the editor could get right to proofreading and line-editing. Though Cait made suggestions regarding content throughout, ultimately that was because she was being nice. She didn&#8217;t have to make any suggestions. </p>



<p>Cait didn&#8217;t have to go<strong><em> rewrite the book</em></strong> because I didn&#8217;t grasp non-fiction essentials such as using an outline, thesis statements, building/developing an argument, how to cite works, and so on and so forth.</p>



<p>We are editors, not ghost writers. A ghost writer costs a lot more money.</p>



<p>As promised, I shall sally forth to the tips.</p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>#1 DIY Adverb Removal</strong></h2>



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<p>Despite what you might have been told, not ALL adverbs are evil. <em>Redundant</em> adverbs are evil. If someone shouts loudly? How else are they going to shout? Whispering <em>quietly?</em></p>



<p><em>***Wow, glad the author explained how &#8216;whispering&#8217; works.</em></p>



<p>Ah, but if a character whispers&nbsp;<em>seductively</em>? The adverb&nbsp;<em>seductively&nbsp;</em>gives us a quality to the whisper that isn&#8217;t inherent in the definition of the verb.&nbsp;Check your work for adverbs and kill the redundant ones.</p>



<p>Either we need to choose a stronger verb, or we&#8217;re treating the reader like an idiot.</p>



<p>If a character <em>walks quickly</em> to the train platform, then choose a verb that means &#8216;to walk quickly&#8217; (stride, jog, hurry) and use that one instead. If a character&nbsp;<em>yells loudly</em>, ditch the&nbsp;<em>loudly.&nbsp;</em></p>



<p>We understand how yelling &#8216;works.&#8217;</p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>#2 Editing Out the Cray-Cray</strong></h2>



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<p>First and foremost, readers want a STORY. Stories are more than loads of &#8216;pretty writing&#8217; and using thousand-dollar words. Stories are about problems. A character thinks life is fine, then PROBLEM. The character then must struggle, grow, evolve, make choices to eventually SOLVE the problem (win, lose, draw).</p>



<p>Pretty description is optional. Big words are also optional. Alas, if we want to be a writer who uses description then we need to wield with economy.</p>



<p>Few things make me as giddy as a glorious line of description or a new vocabulary word. Many readers (and writers) are like crows.</p>



<p>We see the shinies and tuck them away because they&#8217;re THAT cool. One of my favorite books is&nbsp;<a href="https://www.amazon.com/Devil-White-City-Madness-Changed/dp/0375725601" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer noopener"><em>The Devil in the White City.</em></a></p>



<p>When describing a miserable afternoon in late 19th century Chicago, the author had many options of how to do this. Instead of, &#8220;<em>The day was humid and stifling,&#8221;&nbsp;</em>Erik Larson wrote, &#8220;<em>The air hung with the heavy stillness of a tapestry.</em>&#8220;</p>



<p>There&#8217;s nothing, per se, wrong with the first description. But Larson&#8217;s line was far more visceral because he made use of multiple senses simultaneously.</p>



<p>But some writers take similes too far.</p>



<p>I&#8217;ve seen writers who&#8217;ve used so much &#8216;wordsmithery&#8217; that I had no idea what the heck they were even trying to say. The goal of a novel is to hook readers into a dramatic narrative, not prove we own a thesaurus.</p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>Exhibit A:</strong></h2>



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<p>***Word on the street is the NSA is contemplating either revoking Sean Penn&#8217;s permission to own a thesaurus OR they want to <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2018/04/diagnosing-real-writer/" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer noopener">weaponize his writing</a>.</p>



<p>Metaphors and similes are fantastic literary devices, but need to be used with intention. Yes, in school, our teachers or professors didn&#8217;t ding us for using forty-two metaphors in five pages, but their job was to teach us how to properly use a metaphor or simile, NOT prepare us for commercial publication as professional novelists.</p>



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<p>When we use too much of this verbal glitter, we can create what&#8217;s called &#8216;<a href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Purple_prose" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer noopener">purple prose</a>.&#8217; Go through your pages and highlight metaphors and similes.</p>



<p>Pick THE BEST and CUT THE REST.</p>



<p>Any kind of description must serve the story and propel the dramatic action forward. If it doesn&#8217;t do this? CUT!</p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>#3 Editing Out the Stage Direction</strong></h2>



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<p>Again, the more time an editor devotes to a project, the higher the bill. Also, if an editor charges by the page, we could be paying for a lot of filler we could have removed ourselves.</p>



<p>Alfred Hitchcock said, &#8220;<em>Drama is life with the dull bits cut out.</em>&#8221; Readers&nbsp;don&#8217;t need every single step of a day. We live it, why would we read it?</p>



<p>Yet, I see a lot of samples like this:</p>



<h3 class="wp-block-heading">Fifi opened her eyes at dawn. She pulled back her covers and placed her feet on the floor. Padding across the room, she reached for a robe hanging on her door. Her stomach growled, so she went downstairs and opened the fridge for the carton of orange juice, then grabbed a glass from the cabinet. Turning around, she searched for a granola bar&#8230;.</h3>



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<p>OH, GET ON WITH IT!</p>



<p>An editor is going to cut all of this because NOTHING IS HAPPENING. Also, readers pretty much know how the whole &#8216;getting juice&#8217; phenomenon works. They don&#8217;t need a blow-by-blow.</p>



<p><em>Fifi reached out her hand to open the door.</em></p>



<p>NO KIDDING.</p>



<p>Unless Fifi has telekinetic powers, do readers need the direction?</p>



<p>Filler pads the word count, but it also pads the editing bill. The verbs&nbsp;<em>turn, look, grab, pull </em>are possible&nbsp;red flags you&#8217;re doing too much stage direction. My advice is to do a Word Find and search for these verbs and their variations (I.e. look, looked, looking). See if the action is necessary or if you&#8217;re holding the reader&#8217;s brain.</p>



<p>If you&#8217;re holding the reader&#8217;s brain? Return it, please.</p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>#4 Beware of Painful &amp; Alien Movement of Body Parts</strong></h2>



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<p><em>Her eyes flew to the other end of the restaurant.</em></p>



<p><em>He dropped his head.</em></p>



<p>Um&#8230;ouch.</p>



<p>Make sure your character keeps all body parts attached. Her gaze can follow a person and so can her stare, but if her eyes follow? The carpet gets them fuzzy with dust bunnies and then they don’t slide back in her sockets as easily.</p>



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<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>#5 Ease Up on the Physiology</strong></h2>



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<h3 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>Fifi&#8217;s head pounded. She ran for the door, her heart hammering and wild pulse beating relentlessly in her head. Her breath came in choking sobs. All she could do was gasp. Panic made her throat clench and stomach heave. Mind numb, she reached for the door, fingers trembling.</strong></h3>



<p>GET TO IT ALREADY!</p>



<p>After a page of this? I need a nap. After two pages? I need a drink. We can only take so much heart pounding, thrumming, hammering before we just get worn out. That and I read a lot of samples where the character has her heart pounding so much, I&#8217;m waiting for her to slip into cardiac arrest at any moment.</p>



<p>Physiological reactions can become echoes. If every page the character has her stomach churning, roiling and rolling, our reader will need an antacid before finishing the chapter (provided she finishes at all).</p>



<p>I strongly recommend a copy of Angela Ackerman and Becca Puglisi&#8217;s <a href="http://www.amazon.com/The-Emotion-Thesaurus-Character-Expression/dp/1475004958" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer noopener">Emotion Thesaurus </a>to help you vary physiology. Also, if someone&#8217;s heart is pounding, that&#8217;s okay. We just don&#8217;t need to be told this over and over and&#8230;over.</p>



<p>We (readers) assume the character&#8217;s heart is still pounding until she&#8217;s out of danger.</p>



<p>No need to remind us.</p>



<p>Really.</p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>#6 Editing Out Odd Sentence Construction</strong></h2>



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<p>In an effort to break up and vary sentence structure, many emerging writers will craft sentences like this:</p>



<p><em>With the months of stress pressing <strong>down on</strong> her head, Jessie <strong>started</strong> ironing the restaurant tablecloths with a fury.</em></p>



<p>First, this is backing into the action. Though technically correct (enough), it&#8217;s easy to lose a reader if we have too many sentences like this. Active sentences are the easiest on the brain and keep the reader immersed in the fictive dream.</p>



<p>Then there are the picky issues with the example above. For instance, when we use the word &#8216;down,&#8217; then &#8216;on&#8217; is redundant.</p>



<p>Also, Jessie is either ironing or not ironing. &#8216;Started&#8217; is overused and makes sloppy writing (this actually goes back to the whole stage direction thing).</p>



<p><em>Jessie ironed the restaurant tablecloths with a fury, months of stress pressing on her shoulders.</em></p>



<p>Another way writers will vary the beginning of sentences is they&#8217;ll default to what&#8217;s known as passive voice.</p>



<p>Passive:</p>



<p><em>The door was kicked in by the EMTs.</em></p>



<p>Active:</p>



<p><em>EMTs kicked in the door.</em></p>



<p>If you go through your pages and see WAS clusters? That&#8217;s a HUGE hint that passive voice has infected your story.</p>



<p>Many writers end up with strange sentence construction because they realize every sentence is starting with the character&#8217;s name or the appropriate pronoun. They&#8217;re trying to ameliorate the repetition of <em>Jessie, Jessie, Jessie, she, she, she.</em> The problem, then, is not sentence construction, rather the writer needs to open the lens of the storytelling.</p>



<p>Remember our character doesn&#8217;t need to be the subject of <em>every</em> sentence. We&#8217;re telling a&nbsp;<em>story. </em>This means we can work with setting, other characters, etc.</p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>#7 Get Rid of &#8216;Clever&#8217; Tags</strong></h2>



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<p>Ideally, if we do a good job with our characters, the reader should know who&#8217;s talking without tags because speech patterns differ. If all our characters &#8216;speak&#8217; the same way, that is an issue we need to remedy.</p>



<p>We can&#8217;t always do this, which means we can use a tag. Tags are fine, but keep it simple. This isn&#8217;t the place to get clever.</p>



<p>&#8216;You are such a jerk,&#8217; she laughed.</p>



<p>A character can&#8217;t &#8216;laugh&#8217; something. They can&#8217;t &#8216;spit,&#8217; &#8216;snarl,&#8217; or &#8216;grouse&#8217; words either. They can SAY and ever so often they can ASK. <em>Said</em>&nbsp;used properly becomes white noise.</p>



<p><strong>NOTE: Use <em>said</em> as a tag…just don&#8217;t get crazy. If you beat it up, it also gets distracting and annoying.</strong></p>



<p>But again, used properly readers don&#8217;t generally see it. It keeps them in the story and cooking along. If we want to add things like laughing, griping, complaining, then fine. <strong>It just generally shouldn&#8217;t be the tag.</strong></p>



<p><em>&#8220;You are such a jerk.&#8221; She laughed and flicked brownie batter onto Fabio&#8217;s white shirt.</em></p>



<p>Notice how sentences like the one above also keep us from beating <strong>said</strong> to death?</p>



<p>I swear the funniest instance of bizarre tags was a new writer who just would NOT listen to me and she insisted on using all these crazy tags. So instead of&nbsp;<em>exclaimed</em> when her character yelled something, she tagged with&#8230;<em>he ejaculated.</em></p>



<p><em>*Editor Kristen falls over laughing*</em></p>



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<p>Okay y&#8217;all ALL sniggered at that one. Feel free to be creative just not in the tags, ya dig? <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f609.png" alt="😉" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /></p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>Tip #8 Open Your EYES</strong></h2>



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<p>One thing I will promise y&#8217;all ahead of time is there really is only one way to find all the typos. Publish your book. Seriously. Before I became a <em>professional </em>author, I was super judgy about typos. Now? If I get through a book and there are only a handful of oopses? That is an AWESOME book. Especially if the book is longer&#8230;like 91,000 words.</p>



<p>Maybe I am wrong and I wish all of you a perfect book, but I am still going to offer some hacks I&#8217;ve learned over the years. </p>



<p>One of the reasons it is almost impossible to edit our own work is we have SEEN our own writing SO many times, our brains insert what <em>should be there</em> instead of  <em>seeing</em> what is actually on the page. We become blind to our own errors. </p>



<p>Here are some tricks to help y&#8217;all SEE.</p>



<p>One, is to change the font. Sometimes shifting from Times New Roman to, say, Courier, or Callibri can help. There is also a <a href="https://www.dyslexiefont.com/en/typeface/" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer noopener">downloadable font for people who are dyslexic </a>that is AWESOME.</p>



<p>Another trick is to change the color of the background. When I switch to white letters on a black background, a lot of the repeated words, floating commas, and homeless punctuation practically leaps off the page.</p>



<p>There is also a function in Word that will read your manuscript aloud to you. It certainly isn&#8217;t going to sound like Simon Vance, but <em>hearing </em>the words will help you pick up echoes, passive voice, weird sentence construction and the like. </p>



<h2 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>I LOVE Hearing from Y&#8217;all! What are Your Thoughts?</strong></h2>



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<p>I know there was a lot in today&#8217;s post, but I wanted to offer y&#8217;all a comprehensive reference. There are plenty of books I can recommend in a later post, but this hit a lot of the high points&#8230;and I added in stuff I have learned from years of trial and error.</p>



<p>What are your questions? Suggestions for topics? Thoughts, problems, ways you&#8217;ve figured out how to self-edit?</p>



<p>***FYI: Back in May, I offered my reward for commenting. The next day, I found out my mom had to go in for emergency cancer surgery. She is fine, but I had to stay with her almost two weeks and everything went sideways being away. </p>



<p><strong>SO&#8230;May&#8217;s winner is Katherine Smits.</strong> CONGRATULATIONS! E-mail me at kristen at wana intl dot com. I need your pages in Word, double-spaced, one-inch margins, and 250 words is considered a &#8216;page.&#8217; Feel free to go a little over if you need to finish a thought or paragraph, just don&#8217;t get crazy <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f600.png" alt="😀" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> . Please put CONTEST WINNER in all caps in the header of the email so I can FIND you. Being gone so long, my email has gone a tad feral.</p>



<h3 class="wp-block-heading"><strong>I love hearing from you and am not above bribery!</strong></h3>



<p><strong>What do you WIN? For the month of JULY, for everyone who leaves a comment, I will put your name in a hat. If you comment and link back to my blog on your blog, you get your name in the hat twice. What do you win? The unvarnished truth from yours truly.&nbsp;I will pick a winner once a month and it will be a critique of the first 20 pages of your novel, or your query letter, or your synopsis (5 pages or less).</strong></p>
<p>The post <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2021/07/why-editing-matters-simple-ways-to-make-your-work-shine/">Why Editing Matters &#038; Simple Ways to Make Your Work SHINE</a> appeared first on <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com">Kristen Lamb</a>.</p>
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		<title>Fatal Flaws: Why Your Story is Falling Apart &#038; How to Fix It</title>
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					<description><![CDATA[<p>Recently I blogged about the log-line, how it&#8217;s an incredible diagnostic tool for spotting flaws in a story idea. The brilliance of the log-line is the simplicity. As an editor/writing coach, I can zero in on a story&#8217;s every strength and spot every flaw with a single glance at the log-line. How? Because the log-line &#8230; </p>
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<p>Recently I blogged about <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2018/09/log-line/" target="_blank" rel="noopener">the log-line</a>, how it&#8217;s an incredible diagnostic tool for spotting flaws in a story idea. The brilliance of the log-line is the simplicity. As an editor/writing coach, I can zero in on a story&#8217;s every strength and spot every flaw with a single glance at the log-line.</p>
<p>How? Because the log-line is a prototype (a scaled-down model) of the final product.</p>
<p>Think about car designers. When they have some fabulous idea for the next car of the future, what do they build first? A prototype. It&#8217;s far easier and cheaper to see and fix problems when the car is small enough to fit on a table.</p>
<p>If a company sinks tens of thousands of dollars into a finished snazzy full-sized car, there&#8217;s a far greater level of commitment to keep going even when there&#8217;s that niggling sensation something isn&#8217;t quite right.</p>
<h3><strong>Why?</strong></h3>
<p>Because those involved in the project have already invested a lot of time and money. They also get too attached. Perhaps they fall in love with the color, the hand-stitched leather seats, and the pop-up digital displays.</p>
<h4><strong>In short, they become emotionally attached at the wrong point in the process.</strong></h4>
<p>There&#8217;s a heightened temptation to ignore problems and pray it will sort itself out. It&#8217;s much easier to start (and keep) throwing good money after bad. Sink more time into a disaster.</p>
<p>Same when it comes to building a skyscraper, office complex, condo community, etc. The first step beyond the concept and blueprint is to construct a scaled version (even if this is a virtual/digital model in 2018).</p>
<p>When developers and investors can <strong>see</strong> the final product&#8212;albeit miniaturized&#8212;everything changes. This abstract idea becomes concrete and flaws stand out waving red flags.</p>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-25516" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.48.47-AM-1024x540.png" alt="flaws, story flaws, how to spot structure flaws, self-editing for writers, Kristen Lamb, NaNoWriMo, National NovelWriting Month, pantsing and plotting, how to write fiction" width="553" height="292" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.48.47-AM.png 1024w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.48.47-AM-200x105.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.48.47-AM-300x158.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.48.47-AM-768x405.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.48.47-AM-800x422.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.48.47-AM-759x400.png 759w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.48.47-AM-600x316.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 553px) 100vw, 553px" /></p>
<p>Is the complex too close to a highway and the walls aren&#8217;t thick enough to meet code for sound-proofing? Can the building(s) be accessed easily from the highway?</p>
<p>Or, is the exit nine miles farther down making anyone who lives or works there have to double back and wend their way through a confusing maze of neighborhoods?</p>
<p>Is the art-deco-meets-minimalism idea something that seemed edgy and cool on paper? But, now that one can SEE the buildings, it looks more like a state prison had a baby with an insane asylum? These are things a builder/investor needs to know before they&#8217;re millions in the hole and the buildings are half-built.</p>
<p>Same with novels.</p>
<h2><strong>Problem With Pantsing</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-25517" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.52.29-AM-1024x590.png" alt="" width="484" height="279" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.52.29-AM.png 1024w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.52.29-AM-200x115.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.52.29-AM-300x173.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.52.29-AM-768x443.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.52.29-AM-800x461.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.52.29-AM-694x400.png 694w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.52.29-AM-600x346.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 484px) 100vw, 484px" /></p>
<p>Lack of a clear prototype can create major problems when writing a novel. This is where we can run into trouble pantsing a novel (writing by the seat of our pants).</p>
<p>Before anyone gets their knickers in a twist, feel free to write any way you see fit. Yet, I will say pure pantsing is almost always a sentence for revision hell if you don&#8217;t at least start with a log-line. More often than not, there will be much tearing apart and starting over (refer to image above)&#8230;and drinking.</p>
<p>***Authors who are very good at pantsing <strong>with no preparation</strong> usually either a) began as plotters/outliners and know structure so intuitively they can plot by feel or b) have written and finished so many books they can write a sound structure by feel.</p>
<p>Either way, the pure pantster who doesn&#8217;t need a bazillion revisions is usually a highly experienced author&#8230;or an alien.</p>
<p>And my vote is alien.</p>
<h3><strong>Meet the PLOTser</strong></h3>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-25518" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.56.01-AM-1024x893.png" alt="flaws, story flaws, how to spot structure flaws, self-editing for writers, Kristen Lamb, NaNoWriMo, National NovelWriting Month, pantsing and plotting, how to write fiction" width="372" height="324" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.56.01-AM.png 1024w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.56.01-AM-200x174.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.56.01-AM-300x262.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.56.01-AM-768x670.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.56.01-AM-800x697.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.56.01-AM-459x400.png 459w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.56.01-AM-600x523.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 372px) 100vw, 372px" /></p>
<p>Anyway, outlines aren&#8217;t for everyone. I don&#8217;t like them either and refer to myself as a plotser. I&#8217;ve learned to start with a log-line and get <em>that</em> as solid as possible. THEN, I work out the major landmark points and once this is all accomplished, THEN I write.</p>
<p>The guideposts keep me focused on where I&#8217;m headed (eventually), but also allow some freedom for my imagination to play as well.</p>
<p>Sometimes on my way to a turning point I&#8217;ve pre-<em>planned</em> my subconscious will come up with something even cooler. BUT since I know the overall gist of where I&#8217;m heading?</p>
<p><em>No problemo. </em></p>
<p>Log-lines can keep us on track. They can also make sure we actually have a story before we&#8217;ve invested tens of thousands of words into something that can&#8217;t be fixed without rewriting the entire manuscript.</p>
<p>I can&#8217;t count the number of clients I get who believe they have a finished novel, but what they really have is 80,000-100,000 words. Just because we have a lot of words doesn&#8217;t mean we have a novel.</p>
<p>#AskMeHowIKnow</p>
<h3><strong>A log-line prevents <span style="text-decoration: underline;">this</span> reaction.</strong></h3>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter size-full wp-image-25523" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2017-10-10-at-12.20.30-PM.png" alt="" width="374" height="363" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2017-10-10-at-12.20.30-PM.png 374w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2017-10-10-at-12.20.30-PM-200x194.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2017-10-10-at-12.20.30-PM-300x291.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 374px) 100vw, 374px" /></p>
<p>Often when I talk about log-lines I get samples like these (I am making these up, btw):</p>
<p><strong>Despite being emotionally damaged, a highly trained warrior must fight for his people.</strong></p>
<p>Oh-kay. Fight who? What? Why? This &#8216;log-line&#8217; is actually a warning label: This &#8216;story&#8217; contains random fight scenes with liberal amounts of tedious, self-indulgent navel-gazing.</p>
<p>That and if he&#8217;s a highly trained warrior, then fighting is what he already does well. So&#8230;all righty then.</p>
<p>#SnoozeFest</p>
<p><strong>A defiant prince travels to a forbidden moon against interstellar regulations and must explain to the High Council why he defied the rules.</strong></p>
<p>So a defiant prince is being&#8212;wait for it&#8212;defiant. All right.</p>
<p>He breaks the rules and goes to a moon deemed off-limits. Yet, if we made this log-line into a movie, would we sit on the edge of our seats chomping popcorn breathlessly waiting for the ending?</p>
<p><em>Must explain to the High Council WHY he defied the rules.</em></p>
<p>Perhaps it is me, but Alien C-Span doesn&#8217;t seem terribly exciting.</p>
<p>Assuming the writers haven&#8217;t already committed 100,000 words to each of these stories, we can easily see how a good log-line might help.</p>
<h2><strong>Try Again</strong></h2>
<p><strong>EXAMPLE 1: Despite being emotionally damaged, a highly trained warrior must fight for his people.</strong></p>
<p>This is a statement, not a story.</p>
<p>Instead, how about&#8230;?</p>
<p><strong>EXAMPLE 1A : A once-revered general, betrayed by his emperor, disgraced and sold into slavery must use all his skills to earn fame in the gladiatorial ring for a chance to destroy the ruler who killed his men and butchered his family (<a href="https://www.imdb.com/title/tt0172495/" target="_blank" rel="noopener">Gladiator</a>).</strong></p>
<p>Then there was:</p>
<p><strong>EXAMPLE 2: A defiant prince travels to a forbidden moon against interstellar regulations and must explain to the High Council why he defied the rules.</strong></p>
<p>How about:</p>
<p><strong>EXAMPLE 2A: A sheltered prince left in the desert to die must lead an untrained and disorganized rebellion on a campaign to overthrow an oppressive godlike regime that controls space-time. (<a href="https://www.imdb.com/title/tt0087182/?ref_=fn_al_tt_1" target="_blank" rel="noopener">Dune</a>)</strong></p>
<h2><strong>What Makes the Difference?</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-25519" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.58.53-AM-1024x685.png" alt="flaws, story flaws, how to spot structure flaws, self-editing for writers, Kristen Lamb, NaNoWriMo, National NovelWriting Month, pantsing and plotting, how to write fiction" width="504" height="337" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.58.53-AM.png 1024w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.58.53-AM-200x134.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.58.53-AM-300x201.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.58.53-AM-768x514.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.58.53-AM-800x535.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.58.53-AM-598x400.png 598w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-10.58.53-AM-600x402.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 504px) 100vw, 504px" /></p>
<p>Example 1 flounders because it&#8217;s incomplete. Sure, an emotionally damaged warrior fighting is interesting but what&#8217;s the rest of the story? Without a core problem, antagonist, goal, stakes and ticking clock we have a statement&#8230;not a prototype for a full story.</p>
<p>Anyone who&#8217;s watched <a href="https://www.imdb.com/title/tt0172495/" target="_blank" rel="noopener"><em>Gladiator</em> </a>knows Maximus is a highly-trained warrior and ALSO very emotionally damaged. The actual log-line for the movie from the IMDB is: <strong>A former Roman General sets out to exact vengeance against the corrupt emperor who murdered his family and sent him into slavery.</strong></p>
<p>In one log-line, we have someone perfectly trained to do the job (Maximus) of taking out the emperor. Ah, problem is that despite all his advanced military training&#8230;he&#8217;s been betrayed, his reputation smeared, and he&#8217;s a slave.</p>
<p>#SuxToBeYouMaximus</p>
<p>Thus, there are a lot of <em>barriers</em> preventing the perfect warrior from accomplishing the goal using his standard approach. The writer (God) had to strip his reputation, his men, his family, and his freedom so we&#8217;d have an interesting story.</p>
<p>If the writers didn&#8217;t strip away almost every advantage that made Maximus a target to begin with, the movie would&#8217;ve looked like this:</p>
<p><strong>A skilled fighter gathers his loyal legions, tells them the new plan and they all march on Rome and flush the crap emperor.</strong></p>
<p>Sounds like a movie I want to lov&#8212;sleep through.</p>
<h3><strong>Same with our other log-line, Example 2. </strong></h3>
<p>No one wants to invest 12-15 hours reading a novel that ends with the equivalent of an alien congressional hearing. Ah, but change a few things and we have something&#8230; <strong>spicier</strong> <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f609.png" alt="😉" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> .</p>
<p>Instead of casting an MC who&#8217;s immediately all-powerful and perfect for the job, Frank Herbert made his MC more of &#8216;the least likely to succeed&#8217; type of guy.</p>
<p>Sure, young Paul Atreides has had some hand-to-hand training in the palace via Jean Luc Picard (Gurney Halleck) and mind-power lessons from Mom. Despite this, though, he&#8217;s more of a &#8216;play on my Caladan iPad&#8217; kind of leader than a &#8216;sand in my shorts and ride the worms&#8217; messiah-type.</p>
<p>Which is why the story is still AMAZING decades later.</p>
<h2><strong>Stories Have RULES </strong></h2>
<h4><strong>(If we break them, be sneaky or readers scream FOUL!)</strong></h4>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-25521" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.28.49-AM-1024x880.png" alt="flaws, story flaws, how to spot structure flaws, self-editing for writers, Kristen Lamb, NaNoWriMo, National NovelWriting Month, pantsing and plotting, how to write fiction" width="410" height="352" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.28.49-AM.png 1024w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.28.49-AM-200x172.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.28.49-AM-300x258.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.28.49-AM-768x660.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.28.49-AM-800x687.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.28.49-AM-466x400.png 466w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.28.49-AM-600x515.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 410px) 100vw, 410px" /></p>
<p>One of the major reasons the log-line is so helpful is we can easily see if our story idea has all the necessary ingredients: an intriguing MC, an active goal (CORE story problem with a CLEAR GOAL), stakes, and a ticking clock.</p>
<h3><strong>Intriguing MC</strong></h3>
<p>The most common mistakes I see are that writers will a) offer a name only or b) give us only some uninteresting qualitative descriptor.</p>
<p>I shall demonstrate&#8230;</p>
<p><strong>Joe must free the ship&#8217;s crew who are trapped in cryosleep if he hopes to defeat the alien threat and find the wormhole back to Earth.</strong></p>
<p>All right. Sort of cool, but who the heck is Joe and why should I CARE?</p>
<p>Hint: I don&#8217;t.</p>
<p><strong>The captain must free his ship&#8217;s crew who are trapped in cryosleep if he hopes to defeat the alien threat and find the wormhole back to Earth.</strong></p>
<p>Better. It&#8217;s a neat story idea but weak. Big frigging deal. He frees his crew. Um, he&#8217;s the captain. Kind of his JOB.</p>
<p>How about, this instead:</p>
<p><strong>When the captain of an interstellar prison transport&#8217;s systems are crippled in an alien attack, locking the crew and the most violent prisoners in the galaxy in cryosleep, he must choose between risking everyone&#8217;s life to repair the ship and defeat the alien threat or do nothing, thereby consigning the innocent and the guilty to certain death.</strong></p>
<p>Yes, the log-line is long. I said try to get it into A sentence. Never said it couldn&#8217;t be a LONG sentence. But look at the difference. The first one with Joe is a bad situation and we don&#8217;t know Joe from Adam.</p>
<p>The second example tells us (Joe) is a ship captain, but he is simply doing his JOB. Not terribly interesting. It is ONLY when we toss in a painful and impossible choice that we have ourselves a fabulous story problem.</p>
<p>Obviously one can glean the alien attack disabled the captain&#8217;s ability to selectively wake only the crew. Thus, it becomes the lesser of evils.</p>
<p>A person who is duty-bound to protect the ship<em> and crew</em> has two options and they both seriously suck. One makes a fantastic story with a zillion moral implications&#8230;and the other is a French film.</p>
<p>They all DIE.</p>
<p>The End.</p>
<p>#LifeIsSuffering</p>
<h2><strong>Casting is Essential</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24347" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-20-at-2.48.47-PM.png" alt="flaws, story flaws, how to spot structure flaws, self-editing for writers, Kristen Lamb, NaNoWriMo, National NovelWriting Month, pantsing and plotting, how to write fiction" width="447" height="296" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-20-at-2.48.47-PM.png 500w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-20-at-2.48.47-PM-200x132.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-20-at-2.48.47-PM-300x199.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 447px) 100vw, 447px" /></p>
<p>Many new writers are uncomfortable with flaws and want characters to be larger than life and perfect. Larger than life is okay but perfect=BORING.</p>
<p>Do any of these stories sound interesting?</p>
<p><strong>A brilliant surgeon finds a way to repair his destroyed hands.</strong></p>
<p><strong>An undefeated hockey team wins the gold medal in the Olympics.</strong></p>
<p><strong>The NYC ballet company&#8217;s most disciplined and committed ballerina lands the part of the White Swan <em>and</em> the Black Swan in <em>Swan Lake</em>.</strong></p>
<p>Zzzzzzzzzzz. Let&#8217;s try again.</p>
<p><strong>After the world&#8217;s most brilliant (and narcissistic) surgeon destroys his life, reputation, and hands, he must beg for help from those he&#8217;s openly mocked, but the cure comes with a cost and a crusade (<a href="https://www.imdb.com/title/tt1211837/?ref_=fn_al_tt_1" target="_blank" rel="noopener">Dr. Strange</a>).</strong></p>
<p><strong>The worst hockey team to ever hit the ice must set aside their ego and all they believe they know about hockey to beat the seemingly invincible Russian squad in the 1980 Olympics (<a href="https://www.imdb.com/title/tt0349825/" target="_blank" rel="noopener">Miracle</a>).</strong></p>
<p><strong>The NYC ballet&#8217;s most committed and disciplined ballerina must lose control of everything, including her mind and reality, in order to land the part of <em>both</em> the White Swan and Black Swan in <em>Swan Lake</em> (<a href="https://www.imdb.com/title/tt0947798/?ref_=fn_al_tt_1" target="_blank" rel="noopener">Black Swan</a>).</strong></p>
<h2><strong>Clear TARGET/GOAL</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-25129" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/07/Screen-Shot-2018-07-24-at-8.18.00-AM.png" alt="flaws, story flaws, how to spot structure flaws, self-editing for writers, Kristen Lamb, NaNoWriMo, National NovelWriting Month, pantsing and plotting, how to write fiction" width="350" height="282" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/07/Screen-Shot-2018-07-24-at-8.18.00-AM.png 744w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/07/Screen-Shot-2018-07-24-at-8.18.00-AM-200x161.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/07/Screen-Shot-2018-07-24-at-8.18.00-AM-300x241.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/07/Screen-Shot-2018-07-24-at-8.18.00-AM-498x400.png 498w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/07/Screen-Shot-2018-07-24-at-8.18.00-AM-600x482.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 350px) 100vw, 350px" /></p>
<p>Look at your story&#8217;s log-line and<strong> it should have an active goal</strong>. The MC can&#8217;t simply be flung along like flotsam by bad situations for the entire story. Sure MCs get tossed into the Life Vit-A-Mix, but by Act Two they start pushing back so they can be reborn as full-fledged heroes in Act Three.</p>
<p>Heroes eventually fight back and WIN.</p>
<p>When pondering your log-line, can you picture a film you wouldn&#8217;t dare get up for a bathroom break lest you miss how the story ENDS?</p>
<p>If there is a logical place to take that bathroom break anywhere in your story, TRY HARDER.</p>
<h2><strong>Stakes</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-25525" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.53.12-AM.png" alt="flaws, story flaws, how to spot structure flaws, self-editing for writers, Kristen Lamb, NaNoWriMo, National NovelWriting Month, pantsing and plotting, how to write fiction" width="477" height="284" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.53.12-AM.png 1014w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.53.12-AM-200x119.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.53.12-AM-300x179.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.53.12-AM-768x457.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.53.12-AM-800x477.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.53.12-AM-672x400.png 672w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.53.12-AM-600x357.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 477px) 100vw, 477px" /></p>
<p>What is at stake? What is the MC willing to risk, lose, give up for that which is BETTER? Life, reputation, sanity? What happens if your MC fails?</p>
<p>If Dr. Strange is unwilling to let go of what he believes he knows (his certainty) and humble himself, he&#8217;s doomed to life as a has-been surgeon with a shattered reputation and twisted hands. His life is a cautionary tale against hubris.</p>
<p>The only way to avoid this fate is to humble himself. Once he humbles himself, he realizes there are far larger battles than whether he&#8217;ll make it on a magazine cover. If he fails, the world is doomed.</p>
<p>In <em>Miracle,</em> if the team keeps training the way they always have, then they will again shame their entire country during the Cold War (when morale is crucial). The U.S. Hockey team is at a pivotal point: continue to be synonymous with LOSER or humble themselves and take a chance at being a MIRACLE.</p>
<p>Nina Sayers&#8217; almost superhuman self-control is what makes her <strong>one of the best</strong> dancers in the world, but unless she lets GO of control she&#8217;ll never be <strong>THE best. </strong>She will never dance her dream role. Yet, everything comes at a price. Failure will cost her career and potential legacy&#8230;but success might just cost her sanity and her life.</p>
<p>The only question left to be answered is, &#8220;Will it all be worth it?&#8221;</p>
<h3><strong>Ticking Clock</strong></h3>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-25520" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.04.38-AM-1024x941.png" alt="flaws, story flaws, how to spot structure flaws, self-editing for writers, Kristen Lamb, NaNoWriMo, National NovelWriting Month, pantsing and plotting, how to write fiction" width="331" height="304" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.04.38-AM.png 1024w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.04.38-AM-200x184.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.04.38-AM-300x276.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.04.38-AM-768x706.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.04.38-AM-800x735.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.04.38-AM-435x400.png 435w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2018-09-19-at-11.04.38-AM-600x552.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 331px) 100vw, 331px" /></p>
<p>Our characters shouldn&#8217;t have forever to do what needs to be done. Paul Atreides must lead the Fremen to victory <em>before</em> the Guild arrives with enough force to possibly put down the rebellion.</p>
<p>In <em>Miracle,</em> the team has <em>until</em> the 1980 Olympic games. Nina only has <em>until</em> the <em>Swan Lake</em> roles are finalized (ballerinas have a very short shelf life).</p>
<p>Notice how ALL these components ratchet tension and keep audiences riveted (turning pages). Can the unlikely, ill-equipped MC do what needs to be done in time? If the MC fails, what is lost?</p>
<p>***Hint: It better be BIG.</p>
<h2><strong>Diagnostic</strong></h2>
<p>Back to our prototype. I hope you can now see how every part of the log-line is critical to the story working as a whole. We can look at each component and see if we can do better.</p>
<p>Conversely, if a story is flagging, this is a great diagnostic to help us work on the parts that are actually BROKEN.</p>
<p>How might we make it harder on the MC? Can we make the problem bigger, messier, seemingly unbeatable? Is it feasible to condense the timeline? How can we up the stakes? What MORE can we place in jeopardy?</p>
<p>Remember stakes ideally should be internal and external. What does it mean personally for the MC to win/fail? How will the outer world reflect winning versus failing? As far as this part of the log-line, go big or go home.</p>
<p>Readers are parting with very limited free time so we need to make our stories a good use of that time. No one wants to invest twelve to fifteen hours in a novel where, if the MC fails, he just tries again next year.</p>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-25522" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2016-02-18-at-2.16.04-PM.png" alt="flaws, story flaws, how to spot structure flaws, self-editing for writers, Kristen Lamb, NaNoWriMo, National NovelWriting Month, pantsing and plotting, how to write fiction" width="311" height="319" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2016-02-18-at-2.16.04-PM.png 533w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2016-02-18-at-2.16.04-PM-200x205.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2016-02-18-at-2.16.04-PM-292x300.png 292w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Screen-Shot-2016-02-18-at-2.16.04-PM-390x400.png 390w" sizes="(max-width: 311px) 100vw, 311px" /></p>
<h3><strong>I LOVE hearing from you!</strong></h3>
<p>Does this break down help? Maybe make the idea of using a log-line more appealing? Can you see how, if one component is faulty, it impacts the entire story?</p>
<p>If you&#8217;ve been struggling to write a query or synopsis, try starting with the log-line. It might a) make the job easier or b) reveal what needs to be repaired before you query.</p>
<p><strong>I know this is a detailed blog, but I DO have a class NEXT THURSDAY on how to write query letters and the dreaded SYNOPSIS (and recording of class is free with purchase). </strong></p>
<h3><strong>The FIRST TEN sign-ups get ME repairing, polishing their log-lines for FREE.</strong></h3>
<p>This class can be a game-changer for an author&#8217;s career. Even if we land an agent, trust me, they&#8217;ll ask for a synopsis for the next book and next.</p>
<p>Also, if we become skilled at writing synopses, we can write at a much faster pace. So, I hope y&#8217;all will join me <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f600.png" alt="😀" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> .</p>
<p>Otherwise, what are your THOUGHTS? I reward those who share *group hug*</p>
<p><strong>What do you WIN? For the month of SEPTEMBER, for everyone who leaves a comment, I will put your name in a hat. If you comment and link back to my blog on your blog, you get your name in the hat twice. What do you win? The unvarnished truth from yours truly. </strong><strong>I will pick a winner once a month and it will be a critique of the first 20 pages of your novel, or your query letter, or your synopsis (5 pages or less).</strong></p>
<h2><strong>Upcoming Classes for September</strong></h2>
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<h3><strong>Pitch Perfect&#8212;How To Write a Query Letter &amp; Synopsis that SELLS</strong></h3>
<p>Instructor: Kristen Lamb<br />
Price: $45 USD Standard<br />
Where: W.A.N.A. Digital Classroom<br />
When: Thursday, September 20th 7:00 PM E.S.T. to 9:00 P.M. EST</p>
<p>You&#8217;ve written a novel and now are faced with the two most terrifying challenges all writers face. The query and the synopsis.</p>
<p>Query letters can be daunting. How do you sell yourself? Your work? How can you stand apart without including glitter in your letter?</p>
<h3><strong>***NOTE: DO NOT PUT GLITTER IN YOUR QUERY.</strong></h3>
<p>Good question. We will cover that and more!</p>
<p>But sometimes the query is not enough.</p>
<p>Most writers would rather cut their wrists with a spork than be forced to write the dreaded…synopsis. Yet, this is a valuable skills all writers should learn. Synopses are often requested by agents and editors and it is tough not to feel the need to include every last little detail. Synopses are great for not only keeping your writing on track, but also for pitching your next book and your next to that agent of your choice.</p>
<p>This class will help you learn the fundamentals of writing a query letter and a synopsis. What you must include and what doesn&#8217;t belong.</p>
<p>So make your writing pitch perfect with these two skills!</p>
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<p><strong>Instructor: </strong>Kristen Lamb<br />
<strong>Price: </strong>General Admission $55.00 USD/ GOLD Level $175<br />
<strong>Where: </strong>W.A.N.A. Digital Classroom<br />
<strong>When: Thursday, Thursday September 27th, 2018.</strong> 7:00-9:00 p.m. EST</p>
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					<description><![CDATA[<p>Perspective is key to creating dimensional characters that resonate with the reader. Proper perspective adds dimension that transitions a &#8216;plot puppet&#8217; into what feels like a real &#8216;person.&#8217; POV (point of view) offers readers a glimpse into the character&#8217;s psyche, which will drive thought, action, emotion, conflict, choices, and change. Perspective can also rid our &#8230; </p>
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<p>Perspective is key to creating dimensional characters that resonate with the reader. Proper perspective adds dimension that transitions a &#8216;plot puppet&#8217; into what feels like a real &#8216;person.&#8217;</p>
<p>POV (point of view) offers readers a glimpse into the character&#8217;s psyche, which will drive thought, action, emotion, conflict, choices, and change. Perspective can also rid our stories of &#8216;Talking Head Syndrome&#8217;&#8212;dialogue that all sounds the same.</p>
<p>Last post, I offered <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2018/04/self-editing-writers/" target="_blank" rel="noopener">7 Tips for Self-Editing</a>. As mentioned, good editors are not cheap, but worth their weight in gold. Do as much cleanup as possible on our own? Pros can then step in for what we missed or failed to even see.</p>
<p>An analogy might help. When my son was little, I hired a housekeeper to come clean once a month. Though I kept a tidy enough home, I simply didn&#8217;t have it in me to do the necessary but time-consuming tasks (cleaning blinds, vacuuming baseboards, dusting fans, etc.).</p>
<p>I&#8217;d always clean before the housekeepers arrived (Hubby laughing at me all the while). Yes, it might seem silly, but I could do my own dishes. I could make beds and pick up toys. If the housekeepers did what I could EASILY do on my own? This was a waste of money. I NEEDED them to help with tasks that required ladders, patience, and special tools.</p>
<p>Same with a manuscript.</p>
<h2><strong>Developmental Edit</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-23609" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-14-at-10.58.42-AM-1024x675.png" alt="self-editing tips, self-editing for writers, dialogue tips, creating dimensional characters, how to write dialogue, Kristen Lamb, backstory and novels, soap opera writing, perspective" width="492" height="325" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-14-at-10.58.42-AM.png 1024w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-14-at-10.58.42-AM-600x396.png 600w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-14-at-10.58.42-AM-200x132.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-14-at-10.58.42-AM-300x198.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-14-at-10.58.42-AM-768x507.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-14-at-10.58.42-AM-800x528.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-14-at-10.58.42-AM-606x400.png 606w" sizes="(max-width: 492px) 100vw, 492px" /></p>
<p>So last time I pointed out that proofreading is only ONE form of edit. Sometimes, if an MS keeps getting rejected, it&#8217;s time to bring in a developmental editor. Proofreading is essential, but I can&#8217;t recall ever reading a book and saying: <em>Wow, the author placed every comma perfectly!</em></p>
<p>Developmental editors inspect the MS for what&#8217;s going wrong with the architecture of a story. Is there a plot? If so, is it too weak, too complicated, or too confusing? Are the characters dimensional? Do the characters arc? Are there character redundancies?</p>
<p>Y&#8217;all get the gist.</p>
<p>It&#8217;s very tough, time-consuming work and today we&#8217;re going to telescope in on a very common problem (especially with emerging authors).</p>
<p>Writing.</p>
<p><em>If it sounds like writing, I rewrite it. ~Elmore Leonard</em></p>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24398 size-full" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/04/Screen-Shot-2018-04-03-at-10.48.58-AM.png" alt="self-editing tips, self-editing for writers, dialogue tips, creating dimensional characters, how to write dialogue, Kristen Lamb, backstory and novels, soap opera writing, perspective" width="405" height="313" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/04/Screen-Shot-2018-04-03-at-10.48.58-AM.png 405w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/04/Screen-Shot-2018-04-03-at-10.48.58-AM-200x155.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/04/Screen-Shot-2018-04-03-at-10.48.58-AM-300x232.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 405px) 100vw, 405px" /></p>
<p>This is why those seven tips I gave last time can be so helpful. When we go through our WIP (work in progress) with these &#8216;cutting&#8217; tools, we can strip away what screams &#8216;WRITING!&#8217;</p>
<p>You might laugh, but how often do you have a conversation and use that person&#8217;s name?</p>
<p><em>Good morning, Joe.</em></p>
<p><em>Well, hello, Kristen.</em></p>
<p><em>Joe, did you get the plans for the new design? You know, Joe, we are on a major deadline.</em></p>
<p>Y&#8217;all would be shocked how much of this kind of dialogue I see in samples. People in LIFE don&#8217;t talk like this. If they do?</p>
<p>That&#8217;s seriously weird.</p>
<h2><strong>Soap Opera Writing</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24123" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/Screen-Shot-2018-02-20-at-7.01.50-PM.png" alt="self-editing tips, self-editing for writers, dialogue tips, creating dimensional characters, how to write dialogue, Kristen Lamb, backstory and novels, soap opera writing, perspective" width="428" height="309" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/Screen-Shot-2018-02-20-at-7.01.50-PM.png 513w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/Screen-Shot-2018-02-20-at-7.01.50-PM-200x144.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/Screen-Shot-2018-02-20-at-7.01.50-PM-300x216.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 428px) 100vw, 428px" /></p>
<p>This is what I like to call &#8216;soap opera writing.&#8217; Soap operas were originally written for radio, then eventually shifted to television.</p>
<p>The audience?</p>
<p>Homemakers who might be busy ironing or scrubbing a floor or changing diapers. This is actually HOW these stories earned the name SOAP opera. Back in the day, the soap companies did most of the advertising during these shows.</p>
<p>Anyway&#8230;</p>
<p>In soaps, characters constantly call each other by name in dialogue. They also do a lot of, &#8216;As you know, Bob&#8230;&#8217; and then fill in what&#8217;s happened. Soap operas are a string of vignettes and melodrama (as opposed to dramatic tension). There is no overall plot because soap operas are not meant to end.</p>
<p>Ever.</p>
<p>The reason characters called each other by name was because women busy ironing shirts couldn&#8217;t always SEE the screen. Thus, the characters had to keep calling one another by name so the target audience could follow along.</p>
<p>Soap operas could (can) also dedicate entire scenes to &#8216;As you know, Bob&#8217; writing.</p>
<p><em>As you know, Marlena, Bo and Hope never wanted to divorce. They still love each other. But Stephano tricked them. He helped Sami fake her pregnancy and imprisoned Lucas in a Jell-O mold that gave him amnesia&#8230;.&#8221;</em></p>
<p>****This is why we can miss twenty years of <em>Days of Our Lives</em> and catch up in about a week.</p>
<h2><strong>Point of View</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24240" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-06-at-4.43.02-PM.png" alt="self-editing tips, self-editing for writers, dialogue tips, creating dimensional characters, how to write dialogue, Kristen Lamb, backstory and novels, soap opera writing, perspective" width="438" height="325" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-06-at-4.43.02-PM.png 540w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-06-at-4.43.02-PM-200x149.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-06-at-4.43.02-PM-300x223.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-06-at-4.43.02-PM-539x400.png 539w" sizes="(max-width: 438px) 100vw, 438px" /></p>
<p>Soap operas have the luxury of using talking heads because the &#8216;characters&#8217; are basically mannequins with great hair and fashion sense. They&#8217;re not meant to have a lot of depth because every &#8216;story problem&#8217; is dragged out for months or years. Soaps don&#8217;t hook with a story as much as they hook with morbid curiosity, ergo the cliffhangers and unresolved conflicts.</p>
<p>Soaps employ what I might refer to as a &#8216;bystander effect.&#8217; We hear a couple start arguing in a nice restaurant and cannot help but eavesdrop and see &#8216;how it ends.&#8217;</p>
<p>***In soaps it doesn&#8217;t end, at least not for a minimum of three years.</p>
<p>The reason is that soaps are after longevity, and resolution gets in the way.</p>
<p><em>Days of Our Lives</em> has been running since 1965, so no judgement here. Perhaps one could gather a <em>decade</em> of material and realize a character actually does possess dimension, but it takes TEN YEARS to deliver this&#8230;one painful breadcrumb at a time.</p>
<p>Novelists don&#8217;t have this luxury. Though, as a note, I can tell a writer who watches a lot of soaps <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f609.png" alt="😉" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> .</p>
<h2><strong>Perspective Matters</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-23828" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/01/Screen-Shot-2018-01-08-at-11.33.22-AM.png" alt="self-editing tips, self-editing for writers, dialogue tips, creating dimensional characters, how to write dialogue, Kristen Lamb, backstory and novels, soap opera writing, perspective" width="376" height="376" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/01/Screen-Shot-2018-01-08-at-11.33.22-AM.png 433w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/01/Screen-Shot-2018-01-08-at-11.33.22-AM-300x300.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/01/Screen-Shot-2018-01-08-at-11.33.22-AM-100x100.png 100w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/01/Screen-Shot-2018-01-08-at-11.33.22-AM-200x200.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/01/Screen-Shot-2018-01-08-at-11.33.22-AM-400x400.png 400w" sizes="(max-width: 376px) 100vw, 376px" /></p>
<p>Back to this perspective thing. When creating a character for a <strong>novel</strong>, we need to crawl into the head of the character we&#8217;re writing or they&#8217;ll all sound the same (a lot like us). In my last post, a few commenters mentioned hating <em>said</em> as a tag.</p>
<p><em>Said</em>, when used properly, should be invisible. If it&#8217;s jumping off the page, it&#8217;s because it&#8217;s being overused. Why? First, the <a href="https://www.screenwritinggoldmine.com/the-single-biggest-dialogue-sin/" target="_blank" rel="noopener">conversation is banal filler,</a> which is doing nothing to propel dramatic tension.</p>
<p>Tags are also overused when characters are flat. Lacking in depth, we (the reader) wouldn&#8217;t be able to tell one speaking character from another without a clue (the tag).</p>
<p>When writers do the hard work and create distinct personalities (perspectives), tags are rarely necessary because the speech patterns give away the speaker. I like to read my dialogue aloud to a critical audience and, if they can&#8217;t tell the difference (with no tags)?</p>
<p>I need to try harder.</p>
<h2><strong>Perspective and Narrative</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24032" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/Screen-Shot-2018-02-05-at-11.25.43-AM.png" alt="self-editing tips, self-editing for writers, dialogue tips, creating dimensional characters, how to write dialogue, Kristen Lamb, backstory and novels, soap opera writing, perspective" width="317" height="318" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/Screen-Shot-2018-02-05-at-11.25.43-AM.png 410w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/Screen-Shot-2018-02-05-at-11.25.43-AM-300x300.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/Screen-Shot-2018-02-05-at-11.25.43-AM-100x100.png 100w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/Screen-Shot-2018-02-05-at-11.25.43-AM-200x200.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/Screen-Shot-2018-02-05-at-11.25.43-AM-399x400.png 399w" sizes="(max-width: 317px) 100vw, 317px" /></p>
<p>The internal narrative of a POV character is what clues us into the mental state of the character, because perspective generates conflict and complexity. Perspective dictates what a character notices, how he or she feels and how that character then responds (or doesn&#8217;t).</p>
<p>There are innumerable combinations available so that no character is ever just like any other. Gender, ethnicity, age, background, family, faith (or lack thereof), birth order, trauma, occupation, etc. all color a character&#8217;s perception of events.</p>
<p>A female septuagenarian has a vastly different perspective than a modern female teenager.</p>
<p>Take a trip into a neighborhood:</p>
<p>If our MC is an architect, she&#8217;s likely to notice styles of homes, cornice work, wainscoting, termite-ridden soffits, etc. She&#8217;s also going to know that &#8216;thingie&#8217; actually is CALLED a soffit.</p>
<p>If our MC is fireman, he&#8217;ll <em>definitely</em> notice that jerk parked in front of a hydrant and might even take time to go bang on a door and make the person move the car.</p>
<p>Perspective is important in all genres, but perhaps most important when writing for young people. Our nine-year-old boy shouldn&#8217;t sound like a Baby Boomer.</p>
<p>Recently, I edited a work and the (modern) teenage girl was &#8216;punching in her friend&#8217;s phone number.&#8217; Not in an age of smart phones she isn&#8217;t <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f609.png" alt="😉" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> .</p>
<h2><strong>Just for FUN: An Exercise</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-21091 " src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/01/screen-shot-2012-01-23-at-10-41-44-am.png" alt="self-editing tips, self-editing for writers, dialogue tips, creating dimensional characters, how to write dialogue, Kristen Lamb, backstory and novels, soap opera writing, perspective" width="448" height="378" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/01/screen-shot-2012-01-23-at-10-41-44-am.png 370w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/01/screen-shot-2012-01-23-at-10-41-44-am-300x253.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 448px) 100vw, 448px" /></p>
<p>I&#8217;ve used this little exercise for ages in classes, but this is a great way to train POV (point of view) and hone our empathy skills. Your challenge:</p>
<p>Four POVs. A family of four is taking a road trip. They&#8217;ve been saving over a year to take this vacation, but something goes very wrong (road construction, get lost, car breaks down, demons possess the engine, warp drive on their personal star-van fails). Use your imagination.</p>
<p>In the vehicle (wagon, time-machine, Honda Accord, 1973 hot pink Cadillac), we have Mom, Dad, a teen, and a grandparent. Now, tell the story from ALL FOUR perspectives.</p>
<p>Is grandpa a retired mobster? Does Mom have a pain pill addiction? Is the teenager hiding she&#8217;s a vampire? Does Dad have PTSD from the interstellar wars?</p>
<p>What went wrong? Who&#8217;s fault is it? What does each character prioritize? How do they conflict? What does each character believe the solution should be? How do they come to a resolution of the problem?</p>
<p>ENJOY!</p>
<p>Pick the one that is the toughest for you to write and, if you create something you&#8217;re particularly pleased with? Put in the comments. I&#8217;d love to see your creativity! Bonus point for the contest below.</p>
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		<title>The Dangers of Premature Editing: Pruning Our Stories vs. Pillaging Them</title>
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					<description><![CDATA[<p>Editing is essential for crafting a superlative story. We clip away the excess, delete the superfluous and prune away the detritus to reveal the art. Yet, editing is something we&#8217;re wise to handle with care. While lack of ANY editing is a major problem today, editing too much, too soon is just as big of &#8230; </p>
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<p>Editing is essential for crafting a superlative story. We clip away the excess, delete the superfluous and prune away the detritus to reveal the art. Yet, editing is something we&#8217;re wise to handle with care.</p>
<p>While lack of ANY editing is a major problem today, editing too much, too soon is just as big of a problem. Perhaps an even a bigger one.</p>
<p>For clarity, not all &#8216;editing&#8217; is the same.</p>
<p>Today, we aren&#8217;t discussing proofreading and line-edit. Correcting punctuation, spelling, and grammar is perfectly fine. Moving some commas around is unlikely to endanger story integrity. We&#8217;re addressing the perils of premature <strong>content</strong> <strong>edit/developmental edit.</strong></p>
<p>If we think about this for a moment, what I&#8217;m saying should make sense. If a work is only partially finished, there&#8217;s no way we can truly know what to cut and what to keep. We don&#8217;t yet have enough content/context necessary for clarity.</p>
<p>Editing too early is detrimental in a variety of ways.</p>
<h2><strong>Early Editing Uproots Subconscious Seeds</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24380" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.59.12-AM.png" alt="editing, self-editing for writers, dangers of editing, danger of editing too early, how to finish a novel, Kristen Lamb, Writing Tips, how to edit a novel, types of editing, editing tips, writing tips" width="605" height="360" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.59.12-AM.png 870w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.59.12-AM-200x119.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.59.12-AM-300x179.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.59.12-AM-768x457.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.59.12-AM-800x476.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.59.12-AM-672x400.png 672w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.59.12-AM-600x357.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 605px) 100vw, 605px" /></p>
<p>Our subconscious mind is an amazing machine. Stephen King referred to the subconscious as &#8216;the boys in the basement.&#8217; The prudent author allows those &#8216;boys in the basement&#8217; to do their thing.</p>
<p>The best way to help? <strong>Stop interfering.</strong> The subconscious mind can see the big picture in ways our conscious mind cannot.</p>
<p>Unlike our conscious mind, the subconscious is always working. Busy, busy, busy. It&#8217;s fitting all the pieces together in ways we&#8217;d have a tough time consciously doing.</p>
<p>King has his analogy, and I have mine. I think in terms of planting and cultivating a garden.</p>
<p>We have a story idea (overall image of the &#8216;garden&#8217; we want). Then we might write out a log-line, major plot points or detailed outline (a plan). Overall, we&#8217;re at least generally aware of the story we want to create.</p>
<p>As we write, our subconscious mind is planting seeds that, when viewed in a microcosm of one or three chapters, will frequently seem to make no sense. The idea needs time to put down roots and grow large enough for the conscious mind to accurately discern whether it&#8217;s something to keep or something to cull.</p>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24381" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.00.17-AM.png" alt="editing, self-editing for writers, dangers of editing, danger of editing too early, how to finish a novel, Kristen Lamb, Writing Tips, how to edit a novel, types of editing, editing tips, writing tips" width="582" height="420" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.00.17-AM.png 738w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.00.17-AM-200x144.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.00.17-AM-300x217.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.00.17-AM-554x400.png 554w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.00.17-AM-600x433.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 582px) 100vw, 582px" /></p>
<p>Also a garden generally is not a singular plant. A garden is comprised of <em>many</em> plants of various types, colors, heights, widths, etc. Until our garden reaches a point where we can get a view of the creation <em>as a whole </em>we&#8217;re wasting time. Pruning, moving, replacing is wasted time and energy because we&#8217;re working blind.</p>
<p>Maybe that hyacinth needs to be moved because it&#8217;s too tall OR maybe we need to chill out and wait for the peonies planted nearby to come in.</p>
<p>Once all we&#8217;ve planted grows and blooms, THEN we have a way better idea of what plant needs to be moved, which should be filled in more (add in more coleus), and what&#8217;s a WEED that needs to GO.</p>
<h2><strong>Story as a Garden</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24379" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.57.13-AM.png" alt="editing, self-editing for writers, dangers of editing, danger of editing too early, how to finish a novel, Kristen Lamb, Writing Tips, how to edit a novel, types of editing, editing tips, writing tips" width="542" height="353" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.57.13-AM.png 930w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.57.13-AM-200x131.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.57.13-AM-300x196.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.57.13-AM-768x501.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.57.13-AM-800x522.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.57.13-AM-613x400.png 613w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-10.57.13-AM-600x392.png 600w" sizes="(max-width: 542px) 100vw, 542px" /></p>
<p>I love to garden. In the fall, I decided to start over after a blight ravaged everything I&#8217;d cultivated for six years. I removed all the plants, and prepped for spring. After widening the stones (since I wanted a larger garden) I filled the area with at least a couple thousand pounds of clean soil topped with mulch.</p>
<p>Since I had yet to plant anything intentionally, anything that popped up over fall and winter clearly was a weed.</p>
<p>GONE!</p>
<p>This all changed once I began planting. I had an idea of what I wanted: a beautiful garden bursting with blooms known to attract hummingbirds and butterflies.</p>
<p>Once I had the idea, I planted the bulbs and spread the seeds. Yet, if I ever hope to have my dream garden, it&#8217;s critical for me to resist the impulse to pull anything green and sprouting because it &#8216;might&#8217; be a weed.</p>
<p>Until whatever seedling poking through the mulch grows to a certain point, I have no way to discern flower from weed.</p>
<p>Same with story. We don’t realize that a possibly mind-blowing idea is trying to germinate and take root in the fertile soil of our overall idea.</p>
<p>By editing too early, we can possibly uproot some mind-blowing twist or turn. We might remove the wrong character or delete a scene that should have stayed.</p>
<p>Y&#8217;all might find this hard to believe, but it actually is possible to edit all the life/magic out of a story.</p>
<h2><strong>Early Editing Feeds Fear</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-23635" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-15-at-2.01.52-PM-1024x680.png" alt="editing, self-editing for writers, dangers of editing, danger of editing too early, how to finish a novel, Kristen Lamb, Writing Tips, how to edit a novel, types of editing, editing tips, writing tips" width="592" height="393" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-15-at-2.01.52-PM.png 1024w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-15-at-2.01.52-PM-600x399.png 600w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-15-at-2.01.52-PM-200x133.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-15-at-2.01.52-PM-300x199.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-15-at-2.01.52-PM-768x510.png 768w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-15-at-2.01.52-PM-800x532.png 800w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/11/Screen-Shot-2017-11-15-at-2.01.52-PM-602x400.png 602w" sizes="(max-width: 592px) 100vw, 592px" /></p>
<p>All writers experience fear. Many of us suffer from <a href="http://www.apa.org/gradpsych/2013/11/fraud.aspx" target="_blank" rel="noopener">Imposter Syndrome</a>. We&#8217;re prone to believe unless we are a <em>New York Times best-selling author </em>we are a fraud. If we don&#8217;t have twenty books under our belt or an HBO mini-series based off our stories, we aren&#8217;t <em>real</em> authors.</p>
<p>The problem is that we&#8217;ll never have ANY of this if we consistently fail to finish. <strong>Perfect is the enemy of the finished.</strong> No half-finished novel has ever become a runaway success.</p>
<p>A story doesn&#8217;t have to be &#8216;perfect&#8217; to be a hit. In fact, plenty of decent and even some outright dreadful novels have skyrocketed to the top of the charts.</p>
<p>Stories (like all art) are subjective. It&#8217;s impossible to craft a story everyone will love. There are way more than fifty shades of reader preferences.</p>
<p>Fear can paralyze productivity and halt professional growth. You know what? Maybe our novel is awful, but that isn&#8217;t necessarily because we lack talent.</p>
<p>We might simply be NEW. How many of you can pick up an unfamiliar instrument and are immediately ready to play on stage for money?</p>
<p>Storytelling is an artisan skill that takes years of training and practice. We get better by doing, by failing, then understanding what went wrong where and why. Then, armed with this new insight we write another story, and a <em>better</em> story.</p>
<h2><strong>Poisonous Perfection</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24383 size-full" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.09.56-AM.png" alt="editing, self-editing for writers, dangers of editing, danger of editing too early, how to finish a novel, Kristen Lamb, Writing Tips, how to edit a novel, types of editing, editing tips, writing tips" width="462" height="383" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.09.56-AM.png 462w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.09.56-AM-200x166.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.09.56-AM-300x249.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 462px) 100vw, 462px" /></p>
<p>Editing is a common coping mechanism used to allay anxiety. Maybe we fear we really aren&#8217;t any good. We really are talentless hacks. Our book is terrible. Why are we even doing this? A brain-damaged hamster has more talent. On and on.</p>
<p>Thing is, perhaps all of this is true. We won&#8217;t know until we submit a finished product for peer review (and even then nothing is set in stone).</p>
<p>Yet, if we keep editing and reworking, this buys us time. We want to know if our writing is any good, but also can&#8217;t bear to think it might be truly awful. So long as we remain in literary limbo, we can hold onto our illusions.</p>
<p><em>My book is as good as (insert mega author), even better! I just have to tweak a few scenes before querying&#8230;</em></p>
<p>I want all of you who&#8217;ve even started writing a novel to embrace what a HUGE step that is. The world is brimming with people who spout nonsense like, &#8216;Yeah I always wanted to write a book, except I never could find the time.&#8217;</p>
<p>In their minds the ONLY reason they aren&#8217;t the next George R.R. Martin is a lack of time-management skills. We all know this is bunk. And yet? We have to be really careful we aren&#8217;t doing the same thing.</p>
<p>Getting past the hard part&#8212;starting&#8212;is a fantastic step. Now finish. <em>Pros don&#8217;t find time, we <span style="text-decoration: underline;">make</span> time.</em></p>
<h2><strong>Early Editing KILLS Momentum</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24384 size-full" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.08.31-AM.png" alt="editing, self-editing for writers, dangers of editing, danger of editing too early, how to finish a novel, Kristen Lamb, Writing Tips, how to edit a novel, types of editing, editing tips, writing tips" width="413" height="294" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.08.31-AM.png 413w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.08.31-AM-200x142.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.08.31-AM-300x214.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 413px) 100vw, 413px" /></p>
<p><span style="font-size: inherit; font-family: -apple-system, BlinkMacSystemFont, 'Segoe UI', Roboto, Oxygen-Sans, Ubuntu, Cantarell, 'Helvetica Neue', sans-serif; font-weight: 400; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 1.4em;">If we continue to go back changing things chapter by chapter, changing, changing, changing, either due to critique group feedback or our own self-edit, what happens is that we KILL our forward momentum with a big ol’ red-penning, back-spacing machete.</span></p>
<p><strong><span style="font-size: inherit; font-family: -apple-system, BlinkMacSystemFont, 'Segoe UI', Roboto, Oxygen-Sans, Ubuntu, Cantarell, 'Helvetica Neue', sans-serif; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 1.4em;">We can prune or progress. </span></strong></p>
<p>Do that long enough, and it becomes hard not to be discouraged and ultimately give up. If you have been reworking the first act of your book for months, it can very easily end up in the drawer with all the other unfinished works.</p>
<p>Beginnings are not something I recommend spending too much time &#8216;perfecting.&#8217; The big reason is that very often beginnings will change. Once we write the entire story and actually possess the BIG PICTURE, only then can we judge the merit of any opening.</p>
<p>We may have started too soon, too late, with the wrong hook, etc. Yet, if we spend weeks or months futzing with the opening, we get far too attached.</p>
<p>This means it&#8217;s all the harder to let it go because it&#8217;s a <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2012/09/little-darlings-why-they-must-die-for-real-3/" target="_blank" rel="noopener">Little Darling</a>. I&#8217;ve seen writers crater excellent plots because they refused to part with the opening they love. They would rather <strong>retrofit the rest of the novel</strong> than cut or change the beginning.</p>
<p>Great, now we have a super pretty opening&#8230;but the rest of the story is &#8216;meh&#8217; because it&#8217;s all been redneck engineered to serve the first chapter(s) instead of the overall story.</p>
<h2><strong>An Editing Process I Recommend</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-22687 size-full" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/09/Screen-Shot-2017-09-11-at-9.54.13-AM.png" alt="editing, self-editing for writers, dangers of editing, danger of editing too early, how to finish a novel, Kristen Lamb, Writing Tips, how to edit a novel, types of editing, editing tips, writing tips" width="469" height="258" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/09/Screen-Shot-2017-09-11-at-9.54.13-AM.png 469w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/09/Screen-Shot-2017-09-11-at-9.54.13-AM-200x110.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/09/Screen-Shot-2017-09-11-at-9.54.13-AM-300x165.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 469px) 100vw, 469px" /></p>
<p>There is no &#8216;right&#8217; way when it comes to process. All I can do is possibly share one to try. If you have a way that works? Fabulous. But, if you have a hard-drive bursting with unfinished stories, maybe try something new.</p>
<p>When I write a book (fiction or non-fiction) I leave any kind of content edit for after I&#8217;ve finished the entire first draft. <strong>FYI: Any time I ignore my own advice and don&#8217;t do this? It&#8217;s a disaster.</strong></p>
<p>Now, is it okay to reread what we&#8217;ve written the previous day (session) in order to get grounded? Absolutely! It&#8217;s also perfectly fine to correct spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors.</p>
<p>But, if the correction has anything to do with the STORY (narrative, dialogue, setting, etc.), instead of deleting and/or &#8216;fixing,&#8217; try this. Make notes of what places you <em>believe at the time should be fixed, deleted, changed or even expounded.</em></p>
<p><b>NO changing or deleting</b>. Period. Feel free to highlight and&#8230;</p>
<h2><strong>Make Notes then Move ON</strong></h2>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-24385 size-full" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.21.52-AM.png" alt="editing, self-editing for writers, dangers of editing, danger of editing too early, how to finish a novel, Kristen Lamb, Writing Tips, how to edit a novel, types of editing, editing tips, writing tips" width="502" height="377" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.21.52-AM.png 502w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.21.52-AM-200x150.png 200w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/03/Screen-Shot-2018-03-27-at-11.21.52-AM-300x225.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 502px) 100vw, 502px" /></p>
<p>My advice is&#8212;instead of changing/correcting, etc.&#8212;to make a note that you <em>believe </em>something should be taken out/added/changed at a later time, but leave it be. I also recommend making notes in color. Red, purple, blue.</p>
<p>This technique is valuable in other ways. For instance, it helps maintain momentum when we hit places in the WIP where we need to fact check or research. I&#8217;ve been coauthoring a Western and am new to writing historical.</p>
<p>Trust me, it&#8217;s easy to lose a whole day on the Internet researching. Instead of stopping, I might write the scene with the people and in another color, make a note, &#8216;Research first class trains in 1870s.&#8217;</p>
<p>This allows me to keep writing instead of wandering off and making myself an expert in 19th century American rail travel.</p>
<p>Another way this method helps is if you&#8217;re writing and find yourself STUCK. If you have a log-line and a solid plot idea that&#8217;s fantastic. Yet, there will be times when we can&#8217;t seem to fit the pieces together&#8230;so skip ahead.</p>
<p>When I hit a wall, I might write &#8216;AND THEN ROMI DOES SOMETHING COOL AND FINDS A CLUE&#8217; and pick up at the next logical place. In the meantime, my subconscious will be working on my problem even while I sleep.</p>
<p>Often the &#8216;answers&#8217; my subconscious comes up with are WAY better than anything I could have planned. This also makes for some psychedelic dreams <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f609.png" alt="😉" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> .</p>
<p>This approach also keeps me from fixating and giving my brain vapor lock trying to figure it out. The longer we pause and stay in one place the harder it will be to finish. I am not judging. Literally one finger pointed at y&#8217;all and three at me.</p>
<h2><strong>In the End</strong></h2>
<p>Don’t look back, or you&#8217;ll turn into a pillar or unfinished novels <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f61b.png" alt="😛" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> . Once you&#8217;ve made it through the first draft&#8230;THEN go make the core changes to your story if/as needed.</p>
<p>You may be surprised.</p>
<p>Something you believed HAD to be changed six weeks previously might actually have morphed into the coolest part of your story. Or maybe it was perfectly fine and can be left alone. When you go back to those notes, odds are you&#8217;ll feel differently about what needs changing and even why and HOW it needs changing <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f609.png" alt="😉" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> .</p>
<h2><strong>What Are Your Thoughts?</strong></h2>
<p>Are you addicted to over-editing? Do you keep reworking and reworking and seem to always get stuck? Are you a perfectionist too? Afraid of failure? Or maybe afraid of success? Me? Yes to all of the above. I am a work in progress, too.</p>
<h2><strong>Ready for <em>Book Beast Mode</em>? I Live to Serve&#8230;.</strong></h2>
<p>For anyone who longs to accelerate their plot skills, I recommend my ON DEMAND <a href="https://wanaintl.com/event-registration/?ee=588" target="_blank" rel="noopener">Plot Boss: Writing Novels Readers Want to BUY.</a> Two hours of intensive plot training from MOI&#8230;delivered right to your computer to watch as much as you like <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f600.png" alt="😀" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> .</p>
<p><a href="https://wanaintl.com/event-registration/?ee=620" target="_blank" rel="noopener">The Art of Character </a>is also now available for ON DEMAND.</p>
<p>And if you&#8217;re ready for BOOK BEAST MODE and like saving some cash, you can get both <strong>Plot Boss and Art of Character</strong> in the <strong>Story Boss Bundle (ON DEMAND). Almost FIVE HOURS with me, in your home&#8230;lecturing you. It&#8217;ll be FUN! </strong></p>
<p>Also, REMEMBER my <a href="https://wanaintl.com/event-registration/?ee=602" target="_blank" rel="noopener">Bullies and Baddies: Understanding the Antagonist</a> is THIS WEEK and this class will help you plot faster and tighter than ever. Join me March 29th (7-9 EST). Recordings are always included FREE if you can&#8217;t make it and also for you to be able to review.</p>
<h2><strong>I love hearing from you!</strong></h2>
<p><strong>And am not above bribery!</strong></p>
<p><strong>What do you WIN? For the month of March, for everyone who leaves a comment, I will put your name in a hat. If you comment and link back to my blog on your blog, you get your name in the hat twice. What do you win? The unvarnished truth from yours truly. </strong><strong>I will pick a winner once a month and it will be a critique of the first 20 pages of your novel, or your query letter, or your synopsis (5 pages or less).</strong></p>
<p>The post <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2018/03/premature-editing-kills-amazing-stories/">The Dangers of Premature Editing: Pruning Our Stories vs. Pillaging Them</a> appeared first on <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com">Kristen Lamb</a>.</p>
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					<description><![CDATA[<p>If we add too much of the wrong thing, we can spoil the entire novel. If we cut too much of the right stuff we can collapse the story. </p>
<p>The post <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2016/08/so-you-wrote-a-first-draft-dear-god-what-now/">So You Wrote a First Draft&#8212;Dear God! What NOW?</a> appeared first on <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com">Kristen Lamb</a>.</p>
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<p>Once we have that crappy first draft usually there will be two major things we need to do…fill or cut. Okay, drinking makes three. And maybe wondering why we didn&#8217;t go to dental hygienist school instead makes four….</p>
<p>Anyway.</p>
<h3><span style="color:#0000ff;"><strong>While it is true that too little substance can generate confusion, too much fluff can create distraction.</strong></span></h3>
<p>There needs to be a balance between&#8230;</p>
<p><em>Enough about the damn snowstorm! </em>and <em>Wait? There was snow?</em></p>
<p>Thus, once we have that completed first draft and begin our read-through we need to make these refinements to see if what we created meets or exceeds our expectations.</p>
<p>Sadly this is usually the first draft.</p>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter size-full wp-image-19999" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-49-42-pm.png" alt="Screen Shot 2016-08-11 at 7.49.42 PM" width="270" height="391" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-49-42-pm.png 270w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-49-42-pm-207x300.png 207w" sizes="(max-width: 270px) 100vw, 270px" /></p>
<p>Much of what we will need to do is going to be dictated by what kind of writer we are. Are we a Trimmer or an Embellisher? There is a fantastic post over on <a href="http://writerunboxed.com/2016/07/20/the-synergy-of-the-first-draft-whether-you-trim-or-embellish/#more-43697" target="_blank">Writer Unboxed</a> that describes these two types of writers.</p>
<p>Some writers do a very sparse first draft that acts a lot like a frame for paper machet. It is really meant to just give an idea of the final form and serve as a guide.</p>
<p><div id="attachment_19995" style="width: 599px" class="wp-caption aligncenter"><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" aria-describedby="caption-attachment-19995" class="size-full wp-image-19995" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-37-35-pm.png" alt="Image via Flickr Creative Commons courtesy of Suzette." width="599" height="400" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-37-35-pm.png 599w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-37-35-pm-300x200.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 599px) 100vw, 599px" /><p id="caption-attachment-19995" class="wp-caption-text">Image via Flickr Creative Commons courtesy of Suzette.</p></div></p>
<p>Once the structure is inspected and found to be solid enough for government work, the writer then goes back through and fleshes in the work.</p>
<p>Other writers write super heavy then carve away what doesn&#8217;t serve the story.</p>
<p>And while I think all of us will identify with one type or another (Trimmer or Embellisher) it really helps to know <em>what </em>to add and/or <em>what </em>to cut.</p>
<p>If we add too much of the wrong thing, we can spoil the entire novel. If we cut too much of the right stuff we can collapse the story. Thus I hope today to at least give you some guidance beyond the more surface line-edit tips I&#8217;ve given before (<a href="https://warriorwriters.wordpress.com/2016/05/16/six-ways-to-self-edit-polish-your-prose/" target="_blank">6 Ways to Self-Edit and Polish Your Prose</a>) though those are super helpful as well.</p>
<p>When I do a content edit for any writer, these are the main areas I am looking for.</p>
<h1><strong>What To Cut</strong></h1>
<p><div id="attachment_19996" style="width: 589px" class="wp-caption aligncenter"><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" aria-describedby="caption-attachment-19996" class="size-full wp-image-19996" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-43-34-pm.png" alt="Image via Flickr Creative Commons, courtesy of Jojo Nicado" width="589" height="393" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-43-34-pm.png 589w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-43-34-pm-300x200.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 589px) 100vw, 589px" /><p id="caption-attachment-19996" class="wp-caption-text">Image via Flickr Creative Commons, courtesy of Jojo Nicado</p></div></p>
<h2><span style="color:#0000ff;"><strong>Character Redundancy</strong></span></h2>
<p>Each character should have a distinctive personality. This personality will give them a corresponding unique purpose to driving the story forward and generating conflict.</p>
<p>In <em>Lord of the Rings</em> the main story problem is of course created by Sauron (the whole evil ring thing). But, much of the story conflict is actually created by the cast members of the various parties who all have a specific role to play.</p>
<p>Merry and Pippin create a lot of chaos that generates sudden changes in the plan. For instance, the plan was to meet Gandalf at The Prancing Pony NOT to nearly fall into the Dark Rider&#8217;s lap outrunning a ticked off farmer.</p>
<p>The duo is naive, inquisitive and we can kind of bundle them into one because they are a team in their mischief. To have essentially <em>another </em>Merry and or Pippin type character would be a redundancy that would be a distraction.</p>
<p>Ask yourself then: Do I have any characters who could be merged?</p>
<p><div id="attachment_19997" style="width: 391px" class="wp-caption aligncenter"><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" aria-describedby="caption-attachment-19997" class=" wp-image-19997" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-45-32-pm.png" alt="Image via Flickr Creative Commons courtesy of Q Family" width="391" height="296" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-45-32-pm.png 533w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-45-32-pm-300x227.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 391px) 100vw, 391px" /><p id="caption-attachment-19997" class="wp-caption-text">Image via Flickr Creative Commons courtesy of Q Family</p></div></p>
<h2><span style="color:#0000ff;"><strong>Scenes that Don&#8217;t Move the Story Forward</strong></span></h2>
<p>All scenes have one common element. Conflict. There is a goal. No goal and that isn&#8217;t a scene.</p>
<p>Sections of information dump, flashbacks that have no ties to the main plot problem/resolution, or scenes with no conflict (I.e. two characters merely talking about a third character)? CUT.</p>
<h2><span style="color:#0000ff;"><strong>Lackluster Description</strong></span></h2>
<p>Many of us love description. I do. My motto? No metaphor left behind! But description can have two main problems. Either we have a lot of good description but it is SO much that it is bogging down the story. Or, we have description, but it isn&#8217;t anything remarkable and we need to replace it with something better.</p>
<p>Ideally, it will be description that goes below the surface and adds to the plot, sets the tone and heightens tension.</p>
<h3><span style="color:#333399;"><strong>Description is more than a weather report or a police sketch.</strong></span></h3>
<p><em>He was tall and handsome with a chiseled chin and dark wavy hair and&#8230;</em></p>
<p>And he took your purse?</p>
<p>I love this line from the beginning of <a href="https://www.amazon.com/Prisoner-Hell-Gate-Novel/dp/1250089700" target="_blank"><em>Prisoner of Hell Gate</em>,</a> which is a literary suspense and one of my favorite books. This description hooks me and sets my expectations:</p>
<p><strong>Dampness prevails, as always, but at this time less from the river and more from the mugginess that weighs on everything. It penetrates the very bricks, their crumbling mortar spongy to the touch.</strong></p>
<p>I don&#8217;t know about you, but I am practically wilting reading this. It works way better than:</p>
<p><strong>She walked beside the river on a hot summer night.</strong></p>
<p>Though obviously style will dictate how we write description, even lean writers use words that will give the most impact.</p>
<p><strong>He was a boring man dressed in an off-the-rack suit.</strong></p>
<p>Maybe, instead&#8230;</p>
<p><strong>He was the kind of man whose face you forgot even while you were still speaking to him.</strong></p>
<p>Good description is less about piling on details and more about evoking a <em>feeling.</em></p>
<h1><strong>What to Add</strong></h1>
<h2><span style="color:#0000ff;"><strong>Sense of Time and Place</strong></span></h2>
<p>Is this a modern story? Or one set back in time? Is there magic? Technology? What is the setting? Now drop in the details that ground us. Talking heads in a place we aren&#8217;t oriented in is jarring. If this is in the beginning of a book, often it will fail to hook.</p>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter size-full wp-image-19998" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-47-12-pm.png" alt="Screen Shot 2016-08-11 at 7.47.12 PM" width="607" height="393" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-47-12-pm.png 607w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-47-12-pm-600x388.png 600w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-7-47-12-pm-300x194.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 607px) 100vw, 607px" /></p>
<h2><span style="color:#0000ff;"><strong>Character Nuance</strong></span></h2>
<p>If we just roughed out a bare-bones plot, we now need to go put the modeling clay on the skull.</p>
<p>Another one of my all-time favorite books is <a href="https://www.amazon.com/Rot-Ruin-Jonathan-Maberry/dp/1442402334" target="_blank"><em>Rot &amp; Ruin</em> </a>by Jonathan Maberry. Now in a parallel world maybe he just wrote out that he needed &#8220;a brash bounty hunter with a red car&#8221; then <em>later</em> built it into this:</p>
<p><strong>“It was a 1967 Pontiac LeMans Ragtop. Bloodred and so souped-up that she’d outrun any damn thing on the road. And I do mean <em>damned</em> thing.”</strong></p>
<p><strong>That’s how Charlie Matthias always described his car. Then, he’d give a big braying horselaugh, because no matter how many times he said it, he thought it was the funniest joke ever. People tended to laugh with him rather than at the actual joke, because Charlie had a 72-inch chest and 24-inch biceps, and his sweat was a soup of testosterone, anabolic steroids, and Jack Daniels… (Page, 24)</strong></p>
<p>We learned a lot about this character from a three-sentence bit of dialogue, some power-packed description and even some narrative regarding how others <em>responded</em> in the company of this particular character.</p>
<p>This is a really short section that does <em>a lot</em>. It even hints at what type of book this is…a book about zombies. If we happened to pick up this story with no book cover, we&#8217;d &#8220;get&#8221; what it was about.</p>
<h2><span style="color:#0000ff;"><strong>More Conflict/Tension/Surprise</strong></span></h2>
<p>Great stories are about one thing and one thing only. PROBLEMS. Are our characters getting what they want too easily? Too quickly? Is their action toward each goal too linear? Are there enough stakes? Setbacks? Misdirections?</p>
<p>Are the characters&#8217; actions too predictable? Can you maybe do better at defying reader expectations?</p>
<p><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter wp-image-20001" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-8-02-53-pm.png" alt="Screen Shot 2016-08-11 at 8.02.53 PM" width="405" height="254" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-8-02-53-pm.png 619w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-8-02-53-pm-600x376.png 600w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/08/screen-shot-2016-08-11-at-8-02-53-pm-300x188.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 405px) 100vw, 405px" /></p>
<p>Are the characters acting as three-dimensional &#8220;people&#8221; who carry a lot of baggage? Or are they plot-puppets merely doing and saying things because we Author God <em>need them </em>to?</p>
<p>What are your thoughts? Does this help give you a plan of what to do with that first draft? Are you afraid of your office because your WIP might bite you and thus far refuses to be potty trained? What items do you look for? Can you add to the lists I gave?</p>
<p>I LOVE hearing from you!</p>
<p>To prove it and show my love, for the month of AUGUST, everyone who leaves a comment I will put your name in a hat. If you comment and link back to my blog on your blog, you get your name in the hat twice. What do you win? The unvarnished truth from yours truly. I will pick a winner once a month and it will be a critique of the first 20 pages of your novel, or your query letter, or your synopsis (5 pages or less).</p>
<h2><span style="color:#0000ff;"><strong>Check out the other NEW classes below! Now including a log-line class! Can you tell me what your book is about in ONE sentence? If you can&#8217;t<a href="http://wanaintl.com/event-registration/?ee=441" target="_blank"> SIGN UP.</a></strong></span></h2>
<p>All W.A.N.A. classes are on-line and all you need is an internet connection. Recordings are included in the class price.</p>
<h2><strong>Upcoming Classes</strong></h2>
<h3><strong><a href="http://wanaintl.com/event-registration/?ee=436" target="_blank">Blogging for Authors</a> </strong> (August 26th)</h3>
<p>This class will teach you all you need to know to start an author blog good for going the distance. Additionally I would also recommend the class offered earlier that same week (August 22nd) <strong><a href="http://wanaintl.com/event-registration/?ee=439" target="_blank">Branding for Authors</a></strong> to help you with the BIG picture. These classes will benefit you greatly because most blogs will fail because writers waste a lot of time with stuff that won&#8217;t work and never will and that wastes a lot of time.</p>
<p>I am here to help with that <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f609.png" alt="😉" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> .</p>
<h3><strong><a href="http://wanaintl.com/event-registration/?ee=434" target="_blank">Bullies &amp; Baddies&#8212;Understanding the Antagonist September 2nd</a>&#8211;September 2nd</strong></h3>
<p>All fiction must have a core antagonist. The antagonist is the reason for the story problem, but the term “antagonist” can be highly confusing. Without a proper grasp of how to use antagonists, the plot can become a wandering nightmare for the author and the reader.</p>
<p>This class will help you understand how to create solid story problems (even those writing literary fiction) and then give you the skills to layer conflict internally and externally.</p>
<p>Bullies &amp; Baddies&#8212;Understanding the Antagonist Gold</p>
<p>This is a personal workshop to make sure you have a clear story problem. And, if you don’t? I’ll help you create one and tell the story you want to tell. This is done by phone/virtual classroom and by appointment. Expect to block off at least a couple hours.</p>
<h3><a href="http://wanaintl.com/event-registration/?ee=441" target="_blank"><strong>Your Story in a Sentence&#8212;Crafting Your Log-Line</strong></a></h3>
<h3><strong>September 7th</strong></h3>
<p>Log-lines are crucial for understanding the most important detail, &#8220;WHAT is the story ABOUT?&#8221; If we can&#8217;t answer this question in a single sentence? Brain surgery with a spork will be easier than writing a synopsis. Pitching? Querying? A nightmare. Revisions will also take far longer and can be grossly ineffective.</p>
<p>As authors, we tend to think that EVERY detail is important or others won&#8217;t &#8220;get&#8221; our story. Not the case.</p>
<p>If we aren&#8217;t pitching an agent, the log-line is incredibly beneficial for staying on track with a novel or even diagnosing serious flaws within the story before we&#8217;ve written an 80,000 word disaster. Perhaps the protagonist has no goal or a weak goal. Maybe the antagonist needs to be stronger or the story problem clearer.</p>
<p>In this one-hour workshop, I will walk you through how to encapsulate even the most epic of tales into that dreadful &#8220;elevator pitch.&#8221; We will cover the components of a strong log-line and learn red flags telling us when we need to dig deeper. The last hour of class we will workshop log-lines.</p>
<p>The first ten signups will be used as examples that we will workshop in the second hour of class. So get your log-line fixed for FREE by signing up ASAP.</p>
<h3><strong><span style="color:#0000ff;">For those who need help building a platform and keeping it SIMPLE, pick up a copy of my latest social media/branding book<em> <span style="color:#ff0000;">Rise of the Machines&#8212;Human Authors in a Digital World</span></em> on</span> <a href="http://www.amazon.com/Rise-Machines-Human-Authors-Digital-ebook/dp/B00DP7II4A/ref=sr_1_2?ie=UTF8&amp;qid=1408979136&amp;sr=8-2&amp;keywords=Rise+of+the+machines" target="_blank">AMAZON</a>, <a href="https://itunes.apple.com/us/book/rise-of-the-machines/id727223890?mt=11" target="_blank">iBooks</a>, or <a href="http://www.barnesandnoble.com/w/rise-of-the-machines-kristen-lamb/1117165949?ean=2940148405238" target="_blank">Nook</a>. </strong></h3>
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					<description><![CDATA[<p>Never underestimate what your subconscious is capable of doing. Our subconscious mind is planting seeds along the way that can eventually sprout into ideas better than we imagined. Editing too soon can ruin that magic</p>
<p>The post <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2015/10/the-single-best-way-to-finish-a-novel/">The Single Best Way to FINISH Your Novel</a> appeared first on <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com">Kristen Lamb</a>.</p>
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										<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p><div id="attachment_18048" style="width: 620px" class="wp-caption aligncenter"><a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/12065548_10153316764762637_6589247018475872352_n.jpg"><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" aria-describedby="caption-attachment-18048" class="size-large wp-image-18048" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/12065548_10153316764762637_6589247018475872352_n.jpg" alt="Kristen's New Author Pic" width="620" height="620" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/12065548_10153316764762637_6589247018475872352_n.jpg 700w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/12065548_10153316764762637_6589247018475872352_n-300x300.jpg 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/12065548_10153316764762637_6589247018475872352_n-100x100.jpg 100w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/12065548_10153316764762637_6589247018475872352_n-600x600.jpg 600w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/12065548_10153316764762637_6589247018475872352_n-150x150.jpg 150w" sizes="(max-width: 620px) 100vw, 620px" /></a><p id="caption-attachment-18048" class="wp-caption-text">Kristen&#8217;s New Author Pic</p></div></p>
<p>It&#8217;s my FAVORITE time of the year. I SO LOVE HALLOWEEN. It is the best of all the holidays because it is the only holiday where hanging out with family and cleaning my house are optional. There&#8217;s also candy and costumes.</p>
<p>This year I am going as Maleficent. Still working on my costume, and since I wasn&#8217;t sure I was going to be able to pull it off, I actually had a spare Alice in Wonderland costume.</p>
<p>#ThingsOnlyWritersAndPornStarsSay</p>
<p>So of course I had to put THAT to use. And, you are welcome!<br />
[youtube https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R9RyEhxwTkE]</p>
<p>Yes, I filmed myself as Alice in Wonderland in the only room in the house with lighting that didn&#8217;t make me look like Alice in Wonder-When-Botox-Will-Go-On-Sale Land. But, hey, we are all here to have FUN!</p>
<p>Anyway, whether we Nano or not, I want to offer you a lesson about writing a novel. Probably the BEST lesson. Editing is necessary and awesome. In fact, there are a lot of books published that could have used it…a LOT of it. But, like Botox, it can be overdone and ruin something that could have been beautiful.</p>
<p>Editing can and WILL kill your WIP. It WILL tank progress and, if you allow it, it WILL derail you and keep you from finishing Nano. In fact, I think perfecting and editing kill more novels than &#8220;writer&#8217;s block&#8221; ever did. We futz and fuss and fret the magic right out of the work until it dies a lonely death in a forgotten digital file on a forgotten laptop.</p>
<p><em>But how can we NOT edit? How can ignoring editing make our work better? Kristen, are you mad? What&#8217;s next? Cats and dogs living together? </em></p>
<p>It can. Trust me. Better yet. I&#8217;m an editor, so I will show and not tell.</p>
<p>I dig parables, so I have a good one for you.</p>
<p>I love to garden, but I am terrible at reading instructions, which means I am not going to read a <em>How To </em>book or gardening blogs, because I already have enough to read and this would steal time from my great joy&#8230;digging in the dirt. This means that, over the years, I&#8217;ve learned a lot through trial and error.</p>
<p>Code for : Killing Stuff</p>
<p>Almost seven years ago, we bought our first home. We got a sweet deal on it, but it needed work. The yard was little more than mowed field. I couldn&#8217;t wait to get in and pretty it up. I slaved for hours in triple-digit Texas heat digging holes and clearing land for gardens. I&#8217;d always loved oleander and when I found them on sale at the local nursery, I was ecstatic.</p>
<p><a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/screen-shot-2015-10-28-at-10-01-58-am.png"><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" class="aligncenter size-full wp-image-18050" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/screen-shot-2015-10-28-at-10-01-58-am.png" alt="Screen Shot 2015-10-28 at 10.01.58 AM" width="492" height="368" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/screen-shot-2015-10-28-at-10-01-58-am.png 492w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/screen-shot-2015-10-28-at-10-01-58-am-300x224.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 492px) 100vw, 492px" /></a></p>
<p>Normally, oleander this size were about $150 but I got each for less than $20. I planted one on each corner of the house and dreamed of how beautiful they&#8217;d be when they matured.</p>
<p>Then we had the most freakish, freezing winter in Texas history. I&#8217;d never even <em>seen</em> snow before and suddenly we were buried in eight inches of it.</p>
<p><em>The Canadians can all stop laughing now. You guys have things like PLOWS, SNOW SHOVELS, SNOW TIRES&#8230;and COATS.</em></p>
<p>Anyway, the oleanders that seemed to be doing okay during the mild fall were obliterated. When early spring came, I cleaned up all the dead stuff and dug out all the oleanders and threw them away. All except one because I ran out of energy.</p>
<p>Much to my horror, guess what sprouted once it got warmer?</p>
<p><div id="attachment_18049" style="width: 596px" class="wp-caption aligncenter"><a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/screen-shot-2015-10-28-at-10-13-57-am.png"><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" aria-describedby="caption-attachment-18049" class="size-full wp-image-18049" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/screen-shot-2015-10-28-at-10-13-57-am.png" alt="I….LIVE….AGAIN!" width="596" height="598" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/screen-shot-2015-10-28-at-10-13-57-am.png 596w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/screen-shot-2015-10-28-at-10-13-57-am-300x300.png 300w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/screen-shot-2015-10-28-at-10-13-57-am-100x100.png 100w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/10/screen-shot-2015-10-28-at-10-13-57-am-150x150.png 150w" sizes="(max-width: 596px) 100vw, 596px" /></a><p id="caption-attachment-18049" class="wp-caption-text">I….LIVE….AGAIN!</p></div></p>
<p>My last remaining oleander. *sniffles*</p>
<p>To this day, I can&#8217;t look at that oleander without grieving the other four. I feel so foolish. What if I&#8217;d just been patient? What if I hadn&#8217;t been so quick to judge what was &#8220;dead&#8221;?</p>
<p>This is what premature editing can do to our story. When we start hacking away and digging stuff out too soon, we have no idea what treasures we might be tossing in the garbage.</p>
<p>Never underestimate what your subconscious is capable of doing. Our subconscious mind is planting <em>seeds </em>along the way that can eventually sprout into ideas better than we imagined. Editing too soon can ruin that magic and toss it in a Hefty bag, just like my poor oleanders.</p>
<h2><strong>Tips to Avoid Premature Editing</strong></h2>
<h2><span style="color:#800080;"><strong>Fast Draft (Kinda Like Nano on Steroids)</strong></span></h2>
<p><a href="http://www.candacehavens.com/" target="_blank">Candace Havens</a> teaches a method called Fast Draft and I use it to this day. You write the entire novel in a matter of two weeks. No stopping, no looking back. No editing. This is my preferred method, because I am notorious for editing stuff to death.</p>
<p>In the mystery I just sent off to an agent, I <em>forbade</em> content editing. There were times I thought what I was writing was ridiculous. SHEER MADNESS. But, as I got closer to the end, I realized my subconscious was far smarter than I was. I ended up with a richer, deeper story that I never would have been able to consciously plot. Because I didn&#8217;t uproot those seeds of inspiration, I was finally able to watch them bloom into something far more remarkable.</p>
<p>The killer I&#8217;d &#8220;plotted&#8221; was actually a red herring. My subconscious actually had come up with a twist even I didn&#8217;t consciously see. Had I gone back and &#8220;fixed&#8221; things? I would have edited out the best twist in my book.</p>
<p>Thus I challenge those of you who might have a tough time finishing. Give permission to simply WRITE. Your subconscious might have a miracle in store for you.</p>
<h2><span style="color:#800080;"><strong>Limited Edit</strong></span></h2>
<p>Allow yourself to correct typos, punctuation and grammar ONLY. Anything else that <em>you believe </em>needs to be changed, make a note of it <em><span style="color:#800080;">in a different color. </span></em>Then keep moving forward.</p>
<p>I know this isn&#8217;t for everyone. Every time I talk about this topic, I get a half a dozen comments from people who <em>just can&#8217;t bear to not edit.</em> Of course, many of them don&#8217;t have finished books, either.</p>
<p>In the end, these are tips. You have to find what works for you. But I would at least give these methods a try. You can always slay the superfluous adverbs later ;).</p>
<h2><span style="color:#800080;"><strong>Make Notes</strong></span></h2>
<p>If you are tempted to edit, instead, just make a note of it in a different color and keep going. For instance, maybe your protagonist didn&#8217;t have a sister when you started the book, then suddenly she does. You are tempted to edit this new character out. Instead of doing that, just make a note of it and riff with it. Your muse could be doing you a solid.</p>
<p>Writers often whine that they wish the muse would visit, but then when she does, they undo all her magic with edits. Let her help!</p>
<p>Remember that Nanowrimo is NOT about 50,000 perfect words so it is okay if there is a false trail in there. But if there IS, then you at least have some breadcrumbs to get you back on track and you haven&#8217;t wasted precious time polishing something that didn&#8217;t work OR unraveling something seriously cool your muse was gifting to you when you were refilling your <del>vodka</del> coffee ;).</p>
<p>Again, if you LOVE editing and you have finished 20 novels and bathe regularly in $50 bills, keep doing it. I am ALL about writers finding what works for them. There IS no One-Size-Fits-All.</p>
<p>But, if you&#8217;ve had a hard time finishing or you do get stuck, it doesn&#8217;t hurt to give this a try. I argued with pros who told me to stop editing my stuff for YEARS and I was stubborn as a goat (note the pic of me with the horns above&#8212;this is before I put ON my Maleficent costume <img src="https://s.w.org/images/core/emoji/15.0.3/72x72/1f609.png" alt="😉" class="wp-smiley" style="height: 1em; max-height: 1em;" /> ). In all honesty, I really wish I hadn&#8217;t been such a stubborn pain in the @$$.</p>
<p>What are your thoughts? Have you ever gotten overzealous and edited the heart out of a story and later regretted it? What tactics do you use to keep from editing too soon? Does editing early not bother you?</p>
<p>I LOVE hearing from you!</p>
<p>To prove it and show my love, for the month of OCTOBER, everyone who leaves a comment I will put your name in a hat. If you comment and link back to my blog on your blog, you get your name in the hat twice. What do you win? The unvarnished truth from yours truly. I will pick a winner once a month and it will be a critique of the first 20 pages of your novel.</p>
<p><strong><span style="color:#0000ff;">For those who need help building a platform and keeping it SIMPLE, pick up a copy of my latest social media/branding book<em> <span style="color:#ff0000;">Rise of the Machines&#8212;Human Authors in a Digital World</span></em> on</span> <a href="http://www.amazon.com/Rise-Machines-Human-Authors-Digital-ebook/dp/B00DP7II4A/ref=sr_1_2?ie=UTF8&amp;qid=1408979136&amp;sr=8-2&amp;keywords=Rise+of+the+machines" target="_blank">AMAZON</a>, <a href="https://itunes.apple.com/us/book/rise-of-the-machines/id727223890?mt=11" target="_blank">iBooks</a>, or <a href="http://www.barnesandnoble.com/w/rise-of-the-machines-kristen-lamb/1117165949?ean=2940148405238" target="_blank">Nook</a>. </strong></p>
<p>The post <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2015/10/the-single-best-way-to-finish-a-novel/">The Single Best Way to FINISH Your Novel</a> appeared first on <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com">Kristen Lamb</a>.</p>
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		<title>The Single Best Way to Sell Books (Or Lose a Sale)</title>
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					<description><![CDATA[<p>We can blog, tweet, promo, purchase ads and wave pom poms over our book and that is all lovely. Attention is grand. An on-line platform is essential. But, if none of these efforts translate into an actual sale? A lot of time and money wasted. What is the best way to sell books?</p>
<p>The post <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2014/04/the-single-best-way-to-sell-books-or-lose-a-sale/">The Single Best Way to Sell Books (Or Lose a Sale)</a> appeared first on <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com">Kristen Lamb</a>.</p>
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										<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p><div id="attachment_13484" style="width: 525px" class="wp-caption aligncenter"><a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/10/screen-shot-2013-10-17-at-10-12-12-am.png"><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" aria-describedby="caption-attachment-13484" class="size-full wp-image-13484" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/10/screen-shot-2013-10-17-at-10-12-12-am.png" alt="Image via Flickr Creative Commons. Bansky's &quot;Peaceful hearts Doctor&quot; courtesy of Eva Blue." width="525" height="498" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/10/screen-shot-2013-10-17-at-10-12-12-am.png 525w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/10/screen-shot-2013-10-17-at-10-12-12-am-300x285.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 525px) 100vw, 525px" /></a><p id="caption-attachment-13484" class="wp-caption-text">Image via Flickr Creative Commons. Bansky&#8217;s &#8220;Peaceful hearts Doctor&#8221; courtesy of Eva Blue.</p></div></p>
<p>We can blog, tweet, promo, purchase ads and wave pom poms over our book and that is all lovely. Attention is grand. An on-line platform is <em>essential. </em>But, if none of these efforts translate into an actual <em>sale</em>? A lot of time and money wasted. What is the best way to sell books?</p>
<p>We&#8217;ll get there in a sec… *suspenseful music cues*</p>
<p>In my latest book, <em><a href="http://www.amazon.com/Rise-Machines-Authors-Digital-ebook/dp/B00DP7II4A/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&amp;qid=1375839215&amp;sr=8-1&amp;keywords=kristen+lamb" target="_blank">Rise of the Machines&#8211;Human Authors in a Digital World</a> </em>I actually spend a lot of time explaining why advertising and marketing doesn&#8217;t sell books in the new paradigm (or any other, for that matter) and what changes to make for any advertising or marketing to be more effective. Yet, ads, banners, book trailers aside, <em>people want to read a great book.</em></p>
<p>This means our best way of selling books is&#8230;</p>
<p>You ready for this? *drum roll*</p>
<p>Writing great books.</p>
<p>Our sample pages, <em>which are the beginning of the book</em>, are our most priceless selling tool. This is why I&#8217;ve dedicated just as many (if not more) blog posts to teaching craft than I have teaching social media. Social media is not magic and it will work far better with a great product (book). Whouda thunk?</p>
<p>I know most of you&#8217;ve heard agents and editors usually give a book one to three pages, before continuing or chunking into the circular file. You might be thinking <em>one to three pages</em>? But, my story really gets going on page 21.</p>
<p>No.</p>
<p>I&#8217;ve run the first-twenty-pages-contest on this blog for about four years. Most of the samples I get? I don&#8217;t need 20 pages. I need one. Maybe five. At the outset? TEN (but that&#8217;s rare). I already know all the writer&#8217;s good and bad habits as well as the writer&#8217;s level of education and skill (or lack thereof). It&#8217;s simply shocking how many of the same problems plague the beginning of most first-time novels.</p>
<p>And it&#8217;s easy to think this is all very unfair, but think of your own experiences browsing a bookstore. Aside from cover and interesting title and story description, what do we do? We open the book and scan the first couple of pages. If those first pages stink or are lackluster, we don&#8217;t give the writer twenty of fifty or a hundred pages to sell us.</p>
<p>Unless you wrote <em>Girl With the Dragon Tattoo</em> <strong>but he was dead. </strong></p>
<p>So when you are dead, I suppose people give more gratis, because I cannot count the number of times people have said, &#8220;Well, yes GWTDT bored the paint off the walls, but after the first hundred pages, it&#8217;s awesome!&#8221;</p>
<p>I&#8230;am not that motivated. I gave the book more than it&#8217;s due (because the writer was dead) and gave it 20. Next! I&#8217;m aging here.</p>
<p>So if you are reading this blog and you&#8217;re dead? You get more leeway. Also, what&#8217;s it like on the Other Side? Feel free to leave a description in the comments :D.</p>
<p>For the rest of us who remain among the living? One to five pages.</p>
<p>I can tell 99% of what&#8217;s wrong in a book by page five, and so can agents and editors (and readers, though they might not know <em>what </em>is wrong, only they aren&#8217;t hooked).</p>
<p>It&#8217;s sort of like going to a doctor. He/She can tell from the sphygmomanometer (been DYING to use that word) which is a blood-pressure cuff, a look at skin pallor and basic symptoms to tell if a patient has a bum ticker. No need to crack open the patient&#8217;s chest and stare right at the sickly beating heart.</p>
<p><div id="attachment_12691" style="width: 372px" class="wp-caption aligncenter"><a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/08/screen-shot-2013-08-09-at-9-18-57-am.png"><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" aria-describedby="caption-attachment-12691" class=" wp-image-12691 " src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/08/screen-shot-2013-08-09-at-9-18-57-am.png" alt="Image via Flikr Creative Commons, courtesy of the U.S. Navy." width="372" height="258" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/08/screen-shot-2013-08-09-at-9-18-57-am.png 740w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/08/screen-shot-2013-08-09-at-9-18-57-am-600x417.png 600w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/08/screen-shot-2013-08-09-at-9-18-57-am-300x208.png 300w" sizes="(max-width: 372px) 100vw, 372px" /></a><p id="caption-attachment-12691" class="wp-caption-text">Image via Flickr Creative Commons, courtesy of the U.S. Navy.</p></div></p>
<p>Most new writers (especially) have what <a href="http://www.candacehavens.com/index.php/workshops/" target="_blank">Candy Haven&#8217;s </a>calls a fish-head. What do we do with fish-heads? We cut them off and throw them away, unless you are my family, who are <del>scavengers</del> Scandinavians and then they make soup *shivers*. This actually explains the <em>Girl with the Dragon Tattoo </em>mystery.</p>
<p><div id="attachment_12692" style="width: 498px" class="wp-caption aligncenter"><a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/08/fishhead.jpg"><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" aria-describedby="caption-attachment-12692" class="size-full wp-image-12692" src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/08/fishhead.jpg" alt="Original image via Flikr Creative Commons, courtesy of David Pursehouse" width="498" height="373" srcset="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/08/fishhead.jpg 498w, https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/08/fishhead-300x225.jpg 300w" sizes="(max-width: 498px) 100vw, 498px" /></a><p id="caption-attachment-12692" class="wp-caption-text">Original image via Flickr Creative Commons, courtesy of David Pursehouse</p></div></p>
<p><strong>The writer was dead <em>and</em> Swedish.</strong> Apparently Swedish readers <em>looove </em>fish-head-story-soup and somehow convinced others to give it a try. Not saying these are bad books, btw. Clearly, they have a huge fan base and rave reviews. I&#8217;m just I am not patient enough to get to the good stuff (and neither are a lot of other people).</p>
<p>Most new novels need to lose the first hundred pages. But that&#8217;s just something I&#8217;ve gleaned from experience. Yet, who cares about the first hundred if we can&#8217;t care about the first <em>five</em>? Often, the problems in the next 95 pages can be fixed by knowing what went sideways with the first five. Seriously.</p>
<p>Sample pages are&#8230;samples. If we go to Sam&#8217;s or Costco, how many will stop for a sample of egg rolls, pizza, or Acai juice? If the sample Green Juice Gut-Blaster tastes like steel wool mixed with moldy spinach, will you BUY the mega-bottle of Green Juice Gut-Blaster hoping it tastes better by mid-bottle?</p>
<p>My point, exactly.</p>
<p>For a fantastic resource about this, I <em>highly </em>recommend (AGAIN) Les Edgerton&#8217;s<a href="http://www.amazon.com/Hooked-Write-Fiction-Grabs-Readers/dp/1582974578" target="_blank"> Hooked.</a> Also, tonight is my First Five Pages Class to help you out (deets down the page), because we all know that the TOUGHEST part of writing a book is the BEGINNING….then the middle and WHOA&#8212;crap&#8212;the end. But, this class is for the first FIVE because if we can&#8217;t nab a reader there? The rest is moot.</p>
<p>What makes you stop reading a book? How long do you give books? Are you patient enough to wait a hundred pages for it to get interesting? What do you find the hardest about writing the beginning of the book? Have you lopped off your own fish heads?</p>
<p>I LOVE hearing from you!</p>
<p>To prove it and show my love, for the month of APRIL, everyone who leaves a comment I will put your name in a hat. If you comment and link back to my blog on your blog, you get your name in the hat twice. What do you win? The unvarnished truth from yours truly. I will pick a winner once a month and it will be a critique of the first 20 pages of your novel, or your query letter, or your synopsis (5 pages or less).</p>
<p><strong>If you want more help with plot problems, antagonists, structure, beginnings, then I have TWO classes coming up to help you!</strong></p>
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					<description><![CDATA[<p>This is my preferred method, because I am notorious for editing stuff to death. In the novel I just finished, I forbade content editing. There were times I thought what I was writing was ridiculous. SHEER MADNESS. But, as I got closer to the end, I realized my subconscious was far smarter than I am. </p>
<p>The post <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2014/03/lessons-from-oleander-the-dangers-of-premature-editing/">Lessons from Oleander&#8211;The Dangers of Premature Editing</a> appeared first on <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com">Kristen Lamb</a>.</p>
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										<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p><div id="attachment_9669" style="width: 496px" class="wp-caption aligncenter"><a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/03/screen-shot-2013-01-17-at-12-50-44-pm.png"><img loading="lazy" decoding="async" aria-describedby="caption-attachment-9669" class=" wp-image-9669 " src="https://authorkristenlamb.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/03/screen-shot-2013-01-17-at-12-50-44-pm.png" alt="Please don't kill me." width="496" height="369" /></a><p id="caption-attachment-9669" class="wp-caption-text">Please don&#8217;t kill me.</p></div></p>
<p>I love to garden, but I am terrible at reading instructions, which means I am not going to read a <em>How To </em>book or gardening blogs, because I already have enough to read and this would steal time from my great joy&#8230;digging in the dirt. This means that, over the years, I&#8217;ve learned a lot through trial and error.</p>
<p>Code for : Killing Stuff</p>
<p>Almost five years ago, we bought our first home. We got a sweet deal on it, but it needed work. The yard was little more than mowed field. I couldn&#8217;t wait to get in and pretty it up. I slaved for hours in triple-digit Texas heat digging holes and clearing land for gardens. I&#8217;d always loved oleander and when I found them on sale at the local nursery, I was ecstatic. Normally, oleander this size were over $100 but I got each for less than $20. I planted one on each corner of the house and dreamed of how beautiful they&#8217;d be when they matured.</p>
<p>Then we had the most freakish, freezing winter in Texas history. I&#8217;d never even <em>seen</em> snow before and suddenly we were buried in eight inches of it.</p>
<p><em>The Canadians can all stop laughing now. You guys have things like PLOWS, SNOW SHOVELS, SNOW TIRES&#8230;and COATS.</em></p>
<p>Anyway, the oleanders that seemed to be doing okay during the mild fall were obliterated. When early spring came, I cleaned up all the dead stuff and dug out all the oleanders and threw them away. All except one because I ran out of energy.</p>
<p>Much to my horror, guess what sprouted once it got warmer?</p>
<p>My last remaining oleander. *sniffles*</p>
<p>To this day, I can&#8217;t look at that oleander without grieving the other four. I feel so foolish. What if I&#8217;d just been patient? What if I hadn&#8217;t been so quick to judge what was &#8220;dead&#8221;?</p>
<p>This is what premature editing can do to our story. When we start hacking away and digging stuff out too soon, we have no idea what treasures we might be tossing in the garbage. Never underestimate what your subconscious is capable of doing. Our subconscious mind is planting <em>seeds </em>along the way that can eventually sprout into ideas better than we imagined. Editing too soon can ruin that magic and toss it in a Hefty bag, just like my poor oleanders.</p>
<p><strong>Tips to Avoid Premature Editing</strong></p>
<p><span style="color:#800080;"><strong>Fast Draft</strong></span></p>
<p><a href="http://www.candacehavens.com/" target="_blank">Candace Havens</a> teaches a method called Fast Draft. You write the entire novel in a matter of two weeks. No stopping, no looking back. No editing. This is my preferred method, because I am notorious for editing stuff to death. In the novel I just finished, I <em>forbade</em> content editing. There were times I thought what I was writing was ridiculous. SHEER MADNESS. But, as I got closer to the end, I realized my subconscious was far smarter than I am. I ended up with a richer, deeper story that I never would have been able to consciously plot. Because I didn&#8217;t uproot those seeds of inspiration, I was finally able to watch them bloom into something far more remarkable.</p>
<p>Thus I challenge those of you who might have a tough time finishing. Give permission to simply WRITE. Your subconscious might have a miracle in store for you.</p>
<p><span style="color:#800080;"><strong>Limited Edit</strong></span></p>
<p>Allow yourself to correct typos, punctuation and grammar ONLY. Anything else that <em>you believe </em>needs to be changed, make a note of it <em><span style="color:#800080;">in a different color. </span></em>Then keep moving forward.</p>
<p>I know this isn&#8217;t for everyone. Every time I talk about this topic, I get a half a dozen comments from people who <em>just can&#8217;t bear to not edit.</em> Of course, many of them don&#8217;t have finished books, either.</p>
<p>In the end, these are tips. You have to find what works for you. But I would at least give these methods a try. You can always slay the superfluous adverbs later ;).</p>
<p>What are your thoughts? Have you ever gotten overzealous and edited the heart out of a story and later regretted it? What tactics do you use to keep from editing too soon? Does editing early not bother you?</p>
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<p>The post <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com/2014/03/lessons-from-oleander-the-dangers-of-premature-editing/">Lessons from Oleander&#8211;The Dangers of Premature Editing</a> appeared first on <a href="https://authorkristenlamb.com">Kristen Lamb</a>.</p>
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